Yardbird
replying on Football by Tom Colebrooke
21 Nov 2002, 5:53 AM
Nicely done!
very nice, taps into a wealth of different ideas related to bullying, with just a twist of self loathing
Here's a good'un - what do you call an illiterate moron with the flair, wit and charisma of goat's piss? If nobody answered "Dark Angel" to that one I'd be much surprised...
Dude...
Egad! And I thought mine was small! The mind truly boggles...
Yardbird
replying on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
21 Nov 2002, 4:51 AM
You know your classics! Fan-bloody-tastic!!!! :)
This isn't as thought provoking and evocative as Dale, though I compare unfairly, I always find your work interesting and this is good but it needs something more. I feel this is a more emotional voyeuristic effort rather than stright from the heart.
It sounds like a middle piece lacking a beginning and an end, you normally set the scene so pictorially and it was only a drag of a cuban rather than the full George Burns. Work on it, give it more oooomphhh. ( vote holded for moment )
Oh, dear, it seems we are now dealing with the tired, juvenile routine of 'I know you are, you said you are, so what am I?'. If your pathetic attempts to subdue me weren't so weak and downright irritating (I've seen five-year-olds do better), they'd be almost (ALMOST, mind) funny. Good day to you, sir and take comfort in the fact that at least your life can only improve from this point on, 'cos I can't imagine how it could get any worse...
Ranger
on Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
21 Nov 2002, 2:41 AM
I really think this is one of the funniest things I've read in a long time...definately worthy of a big fat ten!
Strange how this relates so closely to so many people's lives.
Bloody brilliant!!! You the man -=Dark Angel=-!! Let's have some more!
My creative writing class is a far cry from group therapy. And I joined this site in the first place because I didn't think it would be a product of the general public. I don't care if the public accepts my poetry, in fact I'd prefer it didn't. Maybe I sound like a stuck up mindless college brat, but the last thing I want to do is communicate with the majority of the John Grisham reading American people.
I denied cancer as a valid subject for poetry, because the content is too loaded. Pain and loss vaguely arrive out of a lot of poems without a conscious effort. I just said it's hard to write about diseases, especially when you know you are writing about them.
You're awfully critical today. I don't like this poem much either...in fact, I think it's pretty lousy. I didn't say I'm good with forms...this is the first time I've actually used them. And for your concern, I haven't been teaching old people how to write pantoums. I primarily write prose and screenplays.
What notion...time? What are you talking about, and what does it have to do with Parkinson's disease? Are you trying to sound clever, or just condescending?