Tintagiles
on Why Did God Do This To Me? by TripleHGurl
20 Oct 2002, 6:41 PM
The more I read this, the more I notice the heresy inherent in it. Daring to claim God made a mistake... Daring to think that people only are taken by God if they agree to, which negates the full glory of the All-Mighty Baker of the World (who apparently left the ktichen for a moment and didn't realise he burnt the cake). By your own beliefs, God can do nothing he shouldn't do; the ways of God pass our understanding, as they say, and we must accept them all. You, girl, have the sheer GALL to question God'S might and Power, and Infinite Justice??? On your knees, girl, on your knees, and pray that ye be purged of the sickest sin of Pride, that Pride which led to Lucifer's own Fall, and blah blah blah blah blah blah blah. I'm sure you can get your preacher to fill in the rest with a nice little sermon on the evils of pride.
It's a bad poem, but at least you don't scream about this sniper character being a coward who knows justice will catch him. You get some points for that. Some. How much do we bet it's a CIA agent doing some after-hours practice?
Ewww!
At least he calls himself Blade instead of Lestat.
So... you know it's impossible for God to do something He shouldn't have, but you still claim that God shouldn't have taken your father, and that God did take your father? Nice one!!
The reason God did not take my father is because I have no father. Indeede, I have no mother. I was woven on a Loom.
I like all three, but I'm a little confused about"fruit punch". How long does it take the sun to set in Oregon on I-5 in the summer?6
Not that I know a whole lot about poetry, my reccomendations are:
Delete "penetration" and "ejaculation" I think less is more with this work. I also think you can say the same thing and get the same result with half the material. Just my opinion. 6
I already know that it's impossibl for God to do someting he shouldn't have. I read the Bible.
So why didn't he take your father if you could care less?
I might.
Whatever.
whitey must be punished, but the sandniggers aren't gonna be the ones to do it...it'll be the yellow race.
the questoion marks have to go, followed by tghe poem. out the window with the lot of it. too goody goody, and mushy without any balance. try tiger milk and some poe.
maybe we'll get lucky and tonight he'll bury the blade for good. in your talent 'a glow' bum. bum. may the shaft hold tight.
Thank you Nicholas.
Exactly what I was thinking when I read the previous comment
Poetry can be whatever we want it to be. There's no need to make definitions.
Nicholas Jones
on A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle
20 Oct 2002, 5:07 AM
Hmm. Doughnuts is one of those words where the American spelling really annoys me for no real reason.
That was deliberately, but maybe it doesn't work. I guess it emphasises the sense of the importance of a single moment of time, but also that time is an ongoing process.
This has a voice of its own, which is something very hard to achieve.
It should actually read 2000, which is still a while ago. I've been plundering the archives at the back of my hard disk. Well, those that survived the great Windows 98 crash of spring 2001.