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Christof on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:54 AM
'brothers and lovers'? You have been paying close heed to Mrs G's work, I think. I wonder if the second stanza needs some more clarification? I'm not quite sure of how the inter-relationships work.
<~> replying on Bowed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:53 AM
knicky and i play scrabble, and she introduced me to he. i have just posted 'loosed', a sequel to this poem.
Christof on Anti-Kinetic by anonymous 18 Oct 2002, 7:48 AM
There's a hint of Yoda in the final 5 or 6 lines - are you a Jedi?
Christof replying on Bowed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:41 AM
I've just been checking out Rex Karrs, one of your friends I think? He's good. You've introduced a few good people here (Knickytoy I think is ace) - how do you know all these poets, whereas I know none? I must hang out in the wrong places.
<~> replying on Bowed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:37 AM
you say woof, i say weft. yes. warp. ain't been there yet. will go scribing later on though, thanks.
Christof on Bobbing for Apples by Rex Karrs 18 Oct 2002, 7:37 AM
Will he be biting into her? An unexpectedly visceral undertone, which I like. I also like the details about the bookworms and the honour students.
<~> on purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey 18 Oct 2002, 7:35 AM
eh.
Christof on Hunter's Moon by Rex Karrs 18 Oct 2002, 7:34 AM
Captivating. The hunter's impotence is so beautifully drawn and held back for the end. 'Shellac of frost' - very good.
<~> on Libra by Rex Karrs 18 Oct 2002, 7:23 AM
happy birthday, rex
Christof on Bowed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:23 AM
The tensions behind this are so powerful. For those who cannot speak, the written word is such an erotic tool. This balances up fear and anticipation, secrecy and disclosure. Woof. Did you get the link for Scriberazone?
Christof on When Your Best Friend Says You Drink Too Much by jessicazee 18 Oct 2002, 7:20 AM
This is full of really great imagery - your visual imagination is full of marvels - but the poem as a whole doesn't hang together for me. Perhaps you should try tighter structures? This is almost too allusive, to the point of incoherence. But your eyes and ears are finely tuned...
<~> on casting couch by darby pyn 18 Oct 2002, 7:05 AM
i like all the images and the way you address the situation. but if it's a fast punk song, giving it a hammering meter. then it would strike down opposition.
<~> on Stamp by worldsofwar 18 Oct 2002, 6:56 AM
why? why why why? this sucks.
<~> on the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY 18 Oct 2002, 6:55 AM
she's givin more than the look. i love this. except for the 69 reference. that's not handles as well as the rest of it. show me you know how to handle it, ua
Christof replying on Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie 18 Oct 2002, 6:49 AM
The interesting paradox is that when the British banned suttee, they were performing a civilised act (amongst lots of admittedly uncivilised acts) but the Indian culture clung onto it almost as a way of raising to fingers to Imperial rule. But I think most rational people are with the English on this particular question. So where does this leave us in the morally relatvistic world? Is there basic morality, or do we let cultures get on with their own lives? Which leads us to the Arab world and America...
<~> on Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones 18 Oct 2002, 6:47 AM
the first 7 lines are clumsier than the balance. it is a sparkling instant, and desrves to be captured so. please consider re-working. i would love to see this shine.
Christof on First Kiss... by loneshadow29 18 Oct 2002, 6:30 AM
I don't think you should lean back on the phrase 'indescribable emotion' - it's the poet's job to describe it, otherwise how can the reader feel it?
Christof on purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey 18 Oct 2002, 6:26 AM
Something tells me that these are not the hardest bunch ever - where are you from, Chalfont St Giles?. A Morris Minor? Recasting Margaret Thatcher as an ace rapper is cool.
Christof on The ballad of woosie by rosiebailey 18 Oct 2002, 6:17 AM
You've forced me to revisit a horrible childhood nightmare - little orange singing men. Yikes.
Christof on You Can by Dariana 18 Oct 2002, 6:14 AM
Also, it just isn't true. bad stuff happens, then you die. That's it. Oh, apart from the good stuff. But it's out of your control, don't fool yourself.