==Doylum
replying on Devotion by Tyriana
16 Oct 2002, 6:55 AM
can i have a finger as well?
The last two stanzas ruin a not too bad first one. Especially the last one.
Nicholas Jones
on haiku's i love but i cannot do them well enough by UAFANTHORPEY
16 Oct 2002, 6:51 AM
I bet there's a eunuch haikuist out there somewhere.
I'll hope the music to this is good. It might just save it.
Ouch. My brain is hurting.
wow, a druggy-poem. not that that's ever been done, and a lot better.
Nice. The business about paths makes me think of Robert Frost - the road not taken.
No! I am Cuba.
i see no irony. grab the dictionary you are using to prop up the short leg of the couch and look up the words you use.
Thank you Mr Christof for your helpful and positive comments. This came because all I can see through the window from my desk is the sky. I was trying to write an essay on poetic responses to industrial Wales, but this happened instead.
devilishly and eau de toilette wrenching...was the soul's conquest greater alive (lived or dead) Where does this lead? hopefully it's just the pain of a beginning; sadly stated and brilliantly composed...I stand with a white flag and surrender to your words, my friend. It's about helpless hope in a distant-ly thought-out mind-less realities. I find it invigorating - like the conquest of becoming or taking over someone else's body or mind. Eve gave the apple to Adam - or was it the other way around? Who knows for certain...the serpent was around. You do good work and always look forward to your thoughts. You sir, wear a cloak around your shoulders...mysterious, mystical creature of another time. Luckily - the beauty shines through this thickness and prowless nature...strong enough to capture the essence of what is important and real in our world of un-realities and superflous flooding. 8
Harsh to all card makers! I have never before considered the ethics of greeting cards - this is sharp.
Hmm, Intresting
Pure genius
Top T action in the first stanza, and good reference to the spork, an underrated utensil. Your eye for detail never fails.
short, but ultimatley good