Mutant_X
replying on Gypsy Fire by Mutant_X
8 Oct 2002, 6:00 PM
coz it's about searchin for somethin that's way far,so i'm diggin and prayin and losin hope
Nonsense.
Wite a poem about teaching Joanna how to take care of herself. That might be interesting and not so stereotypically condescending.
Don't be frightened, I'll take care of you. Here, have a cookie.
Blughh! This is an all around failure. Cliche and badly written. I don't usually comment on bad poetry written by well intentioned youth, but this is so alarmingly bad I could not keep quiet.
Ooh, scary.
Silly, silly nonsense.
Yeah ... I think the people who said it sucked were some of the aforementioned pigeons ... it's more commentary than poetry.
like I didn't already know that. Holy shit.. and next you're gunna tell me the sky is blue right!? I'm dying to know
Female, actually. Do you think you could say anything with any sort of *content?*
What?
It's always annoying when people leave bad comments anonymously ... *sigh* Anyway. The theme here is that my friend sucked. What was so great was that at one point my friend didn't suck. Could I be to blame? Well, I wasn't very understanding when said friend tried to kill herself in my house. So I guess so.
Um... ew.
very good job.
No, it was on paper. It's STILL missing. :(
Just keeps getting better. There's a place called heaven and a place called hell. There is a place as cold and disturbing as nightmares at the bottom of a lake.
The first is from Where the Sidewalk Ends and is called "For Sale," and the second, I don't know where it's from, but it goes
Oh what shall I do
Oh what shall I do
This library book is
42 years overdue
I admit that it's mine
But I can't pay the fine!
Oh what shall I do!
why the hell do you dig?
It's not "bellies." It's "belies," a different word.
Belies, Belied: To picture falsely, to misrepresent. (www.dictionary.com)
Tell me about it
But Ifni, don't you know you're "damn cute" constantly!
Not just when you're "Goth."