Now mike is a collossal tripe.

We're all brats, aren't we?

Kinda sweet really, family, but just enough distant. Like it.

I like the way you've shown the passage of time. First he's 40 and she's 10, then when she's 40, he's 70 and dead. And she's forever 10.

"waiting to be wished upon."
Cute.

-=Dark_Angel=- with or without P.I. embodied.

Sailboat waiting to sail or sailing though foggy. Like it.

Try "Peace that Passes Understanding" again and see if my explanation makes sense. I'd like to know.

Very little action on Poemranker today. I mean by users who don't call themselves "not Dovina."

I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.

Quite good, really, except for the last line, which because I'm accused of being a prude, I will say doesn't fit here.

I suppose if I did not relate to this in my own experience I would pass it off as another ramble by another crazy poet. But since I do, it's enlightening.

This is good, but what are Cylindrical Errs? The last verse seems superfluous.

An actual observation, no doubt. But it lacks and more than observation, nothing really to provoke thoutht.

"there were only two bus. . . "

The votes and comments here tell us something, don't they?

Could be said more effectively in half the words.

The first 5 lines are good. Could end it right there.

I-miss-you poems are very common. They can be good if free from the usual cliches and having something more than the usual that this has.

Very funny. Most of you want to give, or rather lend, other parts. How selfish we are to want it all, or just a heart.

Good thought about Mona and Leo. she really does look stifled. Nice

The repetition is annoying and adds nothing to the impact. "I don't dream of touching a student" is rather trite. "I stop and I write" doesn't need the second I. Still a fairly good overall thought.

Very sad, yes. Some elaboration seems in order.