on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2004, 9:33 AM
You lose me on the last two lines. Before that I see a flood and a canal with a barge on it and wonder how a stonemason belongs here.
on Deep Sleep by Enchantres
12 Sep 2004, 9:35 AM
What a perfect way to die. Nice.
on School 61 by unnesessary
12 Sep 2004, 12:18 PM
I should vote 1 in retaliation, butI rather like this.
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2004, 3:04 PM
Permanently? Eyes caress his coat. Sad.
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2004, 3:07 PM
He won't change. They never do, dear. Take him as he is or not at all. I like the frustration I see in this poem.
on a goblet of divine wine brings me dreams by Prince of Void
12 Sep 2004, 3:11 PM
Yea, I've felt like that, the haunting love of divinity, into the mystical world. Why is that? Good poem.
on Grandpa's boat by Caducus
12 Sep 2004, 3:14 PM
Right. Good.
on Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded by wilco
14 Sep 2004, 10:05 AM
Nothing left to do but blue collar bitching when all the debts are paid? I must be missing something.
on some deleted poem
15 Sep 2004, 4:36 PM
I so appreciate your kind attention to me and your appreciatin of my efforts to overcome great odds. This is most gratifying.
on some deleted poem
15 Sep 2004, 4:40 PM
Live it up, girl. Fantasy may be the best part of love.
on Cassius by helenwales
23 Sep 2004, 4:41 PM
Too vague, but I like the first and last lines.
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2004, 4:51 PM
It makes sense now, but I still don't see why the stonewoman trades in her tools.
on Many Thanks by Dovina
23 Sep 2004, 3:39 PM
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2004, 3:45 PM
First verse is good. Last 2 lines of second verse falter some. Last line of poem might better refer to the first line. The seed was that first smile.
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2004, 4:25 PM
Beautiful
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2004, 4:37 PM
Sessile was good, this leaves me cold. Sorry.
on Middle of the Night by Sasha
23 Sep 2004, 4:54 PM
I like this. It's unusual and right and nicely done.
on Bridesmaids in the Rain by wilco
3 Oct 2004, 10:57 AM
It's the cahmpagne. Love and marriage - they seldom go together. Dream on and enjoy the slow dance at a wedding that isn't yours. Good thoughts
on Crushing Gingersnaps (beat) by INTRANSIT
3 Oct 2004, 11:04 AM
You're getting all choppy on us, truckdriver, swerving all over the beaten path like a meverick mermaid's man in a mania. Is this a kind of second childhood? Not bad in a punk sort of way.