replying on Marriage by Dovina
21 Oct 2005, 11:15 AM
Oh I see, you’re justifying it on the basis of race and Americanism. You’re saying that because 50% of marriage commitments fail, that it’s ok to fail. And you’re further justifying it on the basis that “pure endurance” is not worth the cost. But the kicker is that “romance” becomes the goal.
on a fat man on the dock by ay deee
21 Oct 2005, 10:43 AM
Again, the first line (last line in your other poem) seems out of place, though it's a good line. I'd drop the first verse altogether.
1) It’s good that what you used to think has changed. If I ever thought that being a servant self-negator made me better than he, I would no longer be a servant self-negator.
2) Seldom would the perfect man become a jerk in the long term, though a jerk for an hour is expected.
3) That’s the nicest compliment you have ever given me.
5) My commitment would hold even if he becomes undesirable because it is a commitment, and I believe in commitment. It would be the same with or without kids, though kids add strength to a commitment. Property be damned.
6) Your wedding vow statement, “You are united by a connection that is strong because it is flexible” is what I’m talking about. We change; and the kind of love must change. The extreme outcome of this is an act of faith, where I overlook the wrong, raising his desires over mine, every time, every day.
2) Seldom would the perfect man become a jerk in the long term, though a jerk for an hour is expected.
3) That’s the nicest compliment you have ever given me.
5) My commitment would hold even if he becomes undesirable because it is a commitment, and I believe in commitment. It would be the same with or without kids, though kids add strength to a commitment. Property be damned.
6) Your wedding vow statement, “You are united by a connection that is strong because it is flexible” is what I’m talking about. We change; and the kind of love must change. The extreme outcome of this is an act of faith, where I overlook the wrong, raising his desires over mine, every time, every day.
on Leg by jessicazee
21 Oct 2005, 10:10 AM
It's uncertain whether the legs in the first part are yours or his. It's a sexy romp in any case.
on Leg by jessicazee
21 Oct 2005, 10:10 AM
It's uncertain whether the legs in the first part are yours or his. It's a sexy romp in any case.
replying on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac
21 Oct 2005, 9:55 AM
Now if you'd just get rid of that irritating "late . . .ly" I'd give you a 9.
replying on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac
21 Oct 2005, 9:54 AM
The last sentence is understandable after your edit. You fear religion because you fear conformity's crutch. You want it, but want also want the rogue; you're wild with a homebody bent. I'm surprised you're still married.
If, I DOVINA, were to agree to be a servant and self-negator, it would not be to some jerk self-centered master. The whole point of this discourse is to say that if I marry the perfect man, and at some later time he becomes a jerk, my committment will still hold. I will not can him because he is no longer desirable to me. Do you see that?
replying on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
19 Oct 2005, 8:00 AM
I hardly think INTRANSIT is that much into wholistic philosophy here, but let's see how he answers.
replying on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
19 Oct 2005, 7:53 AM
And if the butcher block is an awakened thing, how can its chips awaken as if something twice awakened?
on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac
19 Oct 2005, 7:47 AM
Why the funky "late-" and "ly" on different lines? Maybe to stress your need for new vocabulary.
Tongue-dance would be a good metaphor, but since you didn't use it, that gives me the right to steal it.
Religion will give you a a scaffold of proper nouns, greetings, and expansive gestures, but then the sentence fumbles, as if the word-dance becomes a twisted twist.
Tongue-dance would be a good metaphor, but since you didn't use it, that gives me the right to steal it.
Religion will give you a a scaffold of proper nouns, greetings, and expansive gestures, but then the sentence fumbles, as if the word-dance becomes a twisted twist.