Comments byDovina, 2541–2560 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Worth by Dovina 27 Jul 2005, 6:22 AM
It is good, and I like it. It`s part of having value that is more than intrinsic.
on Showtime by INTRANSIT 27 Jul 2005, 6:14 AM
God never made a sound, but you tell us not to underestimate God. The white veins were not God, nor were the fireflies? The laughing frogs and anguishing cicadas have it right. What are you, the observer, anguishing with, if not the sounds of God? Say what you mean, man! Or as CS Lewis said, the skill of writing is to know exactly what you want to say, and to say exactly that.
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina 27 Jul 2005, 6:06 AM
Yes I AM DRUNK. Like Milton Buber, I am a philosopher without logic. What you say is true logically, and I am sorry to tell you I see it like a drunk woman. POV is everything in the world of emotion. Mine is after the fact, if there ever was one, when he realized his fault. Mine is the kind of knowledge needed to go on. It`s the sort of understanding that makes a good life out of a bad one. Logic never does that.
replying on Worth by Dovina 27 Jul 2005, 5:58 AM
I am important like a tree is important because I have worth like a tree. I have contribution that people are willing to pay for, like a tree has wood and shade. But I have intrinsic value also, independent of what I produce, at least in the eyes of democracy and the idea of being `endowed by my creator with certain inalienable rights.` Somehow, that is not good enough for me, and I want to be valued for something more tangible.
replying on Worth by Dovina 27 Jul 2005, 5:53 AM
I`m not a tree hugger, though the poem comes close to being so.

I don`see the punctuation problem.

I debated the `coin`in verse three, but decided to keep it so the reader could feel like a coin if he-she wants to. A lot of us want to feel like we have buying power.
replying on Worth by Dovina 27 Jul 2005, 5:49 AM
You must know some being knows.
replying on Worth by Dovina 27 Jul 2005, 5:48 AM
Because I pity a selfish tree? If indeed it is selfish.
replying on SO DON'T GIVE UP ON YOUR LOVE by prettyktm 25 Jul 2005, 6:38 AM
I mean, you`d have to show me a heap of love in your eyes to compensate for what I'm hearing from your pen.
replying on Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp 25 Jul 2005, 6:36 AM
I mean only that a carot, carved like a knief, can hurt if I think it can hurt, or if you hit me hard enough with it.
replying on Noble oboe now sings every next saturday evening by ALChemy 25 Jul 2005, 6:32 AM
I,m not pleased with it. Weizen is German beer. Dunken, probably spelled wrong, is the dark vaqriety.
replying on Dovecote by zodiac 24 Jul 2005, 7:01 AM
To be worth as much as a camel is a position I envy. It is giving, isn't it, that counts and that makes happy. If I live to give happiness, is not that the greatest worth?
on SO DON'T GIVE UP ON YOUR LOVE by prettyktm 24 Jul 2005, 6:56 AM
What a line of bull!! I've heard it all before!!
on A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom 24 Jul 2005, 6:54 AM
Get over it!!!
on Cavern of Chaos by Nuit 24 Jul 2005, 6:45 AM
??? Chaos? What is it?
on Hindsight by darby pyn 24 Jul 2005, 6:43 AM
I don't think you 'stole' your father's eyes. You just emulated him for awhile. That much is ok, and a good thing to do. Now leave him alone like he says. I'd like to be my father. He was a great man!
on Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp 24 Jul 2005, 6:38 AM
A bit like the 'words will never hurt me' nonsenense of a cliche. A carot can hurt if you think it can. I don't get how this is 'spiritually' true. I seems like just the effect of belief.
on Summer of Firsts by Miggy 24 Jul 2005, 6:32 AM
Beware! This looks too much like deception!
on Decoys and Disguises behind large-areas of smoke screens by Beyond_Dreams 24 Jul 2005, 6:30 AM
I'm happy you noticed me in my skirt 'too' short and ruge, not lipstick, on my cheeks. I really can't tell yesterday from today or tomorrow. You can have only one arm and graffitti on your feet, it doesn't matter if you love me. That's where most guys don<#t get it.
on Noble oboe now sings every next saturday evening by ALChemy 24 Jul 2005, 6:24 AM
I'm a little under a Denken Weizen at the moment, but are there realy meadows in Tuscany? I do like to board a starship with its bark and all, of willows and such wherever the memories lead.
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina 24 Jul 2005, 6:18 AM
It's the POV that's differnt. In the case of my poem, I know that he knows, and that he realizes he could only do good engineering under the umbrella of the Company, and incidently with the sexual stimulus of a certain draftswomen. My knowing that is what makes it so much like breasts against his hairy chest. Doesn't that ring with a major difference for you, or is it all about the bridges and stuff like that in your world?