replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
22 Jul 2005, 8:22 AM
"then promoted and monied he runs a team" is clearer, might do that.
The 'damn' is shakey, I know.
I never thought of it as being about God, but in a way it works if you think of it as man created in God's image as creator.
Thanks for the comment.
The 'damn' is shakey, I know.
I never thought of it as being about God, but in a way it works if you think of it as man created in God's image as creator.
Thanks for the comment.
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
22 Jul 2005, 8:19 AM
Awesome in the way the World Trade Center was, or the Golden Gate Bridge is. How do you mean - another go? More detail?
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
22 Jul 2005, 8:17 AM
Could be, but then it would end up a drinking man's crying song. Somehow, we have enough of those.
replying on Low Tide by somemorepoetry
22 Jul 2005, 8:12 AM
I mean it in terms of the imagery and the structure. You have a good flow in the first 2 verses, easily to follow and relate to. Than you try to get the reader into a stick, bucked, etc., and the image is not as vivid and easy flowing as the first. Not that it couldn't be, because the theme is good. It's just not as smooth.
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
22 Jul 2005, 8:05 AM
It's not that I consider his statement wise. I used it a different way than he did, and thought doing so was entirely cute.
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
20 Jul 2005, 1:29 AM
I knew that, and decided to use it anyway.
replying on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
18 Jul 2005, 8:04 AM
It's always desirable to draw attention to your own lonliness. So like a poet he is. Maybe some teenager will read his words scratched on the stud of that wall he's building and say in some distant century, there went a man I can understand, and post it on poemranker.
on she sits back and judges me by hendrimike
18 Jul 2005, 6:15 AM
an angry rant, nothing more.
on Distracted by pletcgm
18 Jul 2005, 6:13 AM
Starts off well enough, but is too simply said toward the end.
on Low Tide by somemorepoetry
18 Jul 2005, 6:12 AM
The first 2 verses are good, then it wanders like a beach comber.
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina
17 Jul 2005, 3:17 PM
I think we have a basic difference of belief about physics. I believe it follows LAWS, which are true whether anybody knows what they are or not. The current statements, which we call the laws of physics, may change, but I don't think the LAWS change. I believe this because so many things are constant and predictible that many other things must be also. It's called probability. It's not moot really, and some other things about physics seem chaotic, challenging my belief. Again, answer, if you desire, what or who made these consistencies I prefer to call LAWS?
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina
16 Jul 2005, 7:16 AM
The world wobbles on its axis due to precession the same as a gyroscope does.
Look up "uniformitarianism" or "principle of uniformity" before you say it doesn't exist. Stuff happens as it has happened - that's the gist of it.
Your third paragraph is hogwash! Uniformity is not negative, as you yourself have implied in DISCUSSION TOPIC FOR THE DAY.
Para 4: Uniformitarians will agree with you. Theists might wonder if God has a hand in it.
DISCUSSION TOPIC FOR THE DAY: Who or what made the laws of physics? I'd answer yours, but it's one of those what-if questions that's, as you say, is moot.
Look up "uniformitarianism" or "principle of uniformity" before you say it doesn't exist. Stuff happens as it has happened - that's the gist of it.
Your third paragraph is hogwash! Uniformity is not negative, as you yourself have implied in DISCUSSION TOPIC FOR THE DAY.
Para 4: Uniformitarians will agree with you. Theists might wonder if God has a hand in it.
DISCUSSION TOPIC FOR THE DAY: Who or what made the laws of physics? I'd answer yours, but it's one of those what-if questions that's, as you say, is moot.
on the smallest box will do by elderking
16 Jul 2005, 7:11 AM
Smll package. Don't they seem trivial after awhile? Movin' on is what it's about. Good.
on Let the Healing Begin by http://bandgeek
16 Jul 2005, 7:08 AM
Talk about a rut! And pretty well told.
replying on Happy Charlene by Dovina
14 Jul 2005, 5:11 PM
I think she's misled, but happy, so why does it matter?
on There she is! by CarterTribe
12 Jul 2005, 1:12 PM
It seems like an honest, though not very poetically written, sentiment that women should try to understand. We often play with the emotions of men, not realizing how deep they are, and it isn't nice.
The lines about "That stupid, nasty,evil h**" and "now the final score’s been set," are disturbing, and I hope you don't really mean them.
The lines about "That stupid, nasty,evil h**" and "now the final score’s been set," are disturbing, and I hope you don't really mean them.
replying on Happy Charlene by Dovina
12 Jul 2005, 10:17 AM
I don’t how it’s serrated, but sedated – alright. That’s what booze and drugs are about, and mind trips like Charlene’s.
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina
12 Jul 2005, 10:11 AM
We drool because we smell the scent of knowing what the universe is all about. We feel close to tasting its essence, but can’t quite understand.
'desaturated' may not be the right word.
'I was' in verse 3 can go.
(That image burned into my heart)- Best, I think, to show how you feel rather than tell us.