on On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee
12 May 2005, 12:03 PM
Is an alwife a fish that spawns on the beach of Lake Michigan? The last line needs some help.
on Covering the white house by INTRANSIT
12 May 2005, 11:45 AM
Somehow the title and the last line are alien to to the rest. Otherwise funny.
replying on Finding Gin and Santa by richa
12 May 2005, 11:38 AM
Some of us receive less pleasure than others from mocking.
Some day I may cease to be amazed and stop wondering what criteria you use in judging the goodness of poems.
Your concern over my drooping, or rather your concern over my possible concern over my drooping, is very tender indeed, and perhaps stems from concern about virility's illusion turning eventually to a joke. A much appreciated 10.
Your concern over my drooping, or rather your concern over my possible concern over my drooping, is very tender indeed, and perhaps stems from concern about virility's illusion turning eventually to a joke. A much appreciated 10.
replying on May Flowers by oneglove
10 May 2005, 5:59 PM
I'm sure the person you wrote it to understood it that way.
on My Life by sleeping monk
10 May 2005, 5:33 PM
I don't think of my life in the comfortable times between being awake.
on May Flowers by oneglove
10 May 2005, 1:37 PM
Is it about some May flowers visible in the neon lights at night, and worth the drive?
on Anniversary by Hallmark
10 May 2005, 1:24 PM
This is very funny. It may not sell many cards, but it's good.
on Lake Michigan by jessicazee
10 May 2005, 1:16 PM
I don't see how the weatherman forces you to trust. It's all about probabilities. Also, Doppler is a short-time-range tool and does little to predict "rain all week."
"gladdened cancer tales" is good.
"gladdened cancer tales" is good.
on The cry of the Locust by nothingtoanyone
10 May 2005, 12:59 PM
Overwritten for what it says.
Why introduce the King James English?
The last line is good.
Why introduce the King James English?
The last line is good.
on Dying breed by INTRANSIT
10 May 2005, 12:06 PM
Either everyone is misinterpreting this or I am. We have here, as I see it, a political statement in favor of truck drivers with some poetry added, and pretty good poetry to boot. I think you could lose the last two lines.
on Finding Gin and Santa by richa
10 May 2005, 11:47 AM
Funny, mocking the séance, but not to some.
replying on Old Friend by Dovina
10 May 2005, 10:49 AM
It was sad for Bob when his pet, Baby Dumpling, was dying of congestive heart disease. As I watched them together near the end, it seemed that it was not sad for Baby Dumpling. The dog seemed happy for an extra measure of attention.
replying on Old Friend by Dovina
10 May 2005, 10:45 AM
Would you like it better if it didn’t rhyme?
replying on Old Friend by Dovina
10 May 2005, 10:44 AM
Some people say a dog knows when its death is near. I prefer to think that an event so traumatic and unknown before entering it cannot be understood by a dog to the extent that humans can understand it. I think our knowledge on the subject has done us little good.
replying on Old Friend by Dovina
10 May 2005, 10:36 AM
Hey, sorry to get all serious on you and offend your sensibilities regarding the intelligence of dogs, but really, wouldn't rather not know?