Comments byDovina, 3301–3320 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Rough Translation (Prose) by William Alfaro 9 Mar 2005, 6:44 AM
Oviously, it was not on your merits. Did you look at their voting records? They didn't have time to even read your poems before voting. Do you know these idiots?
on Rough Translation (Prose) by William Alfaro 8 Mar 2005, 4:14 PM
I'm sure thepinkbunnyofdoom appreciates the 10 you gave to each of his poems today, and the zeros needed to raise several of his to the top 20, helped of course by the 10's of Vince Dolamando, Nicely done! You realize, the poetntial is unlimited with multiple usernames and annonymous votes.
replying on Beetwen by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 3:02 PM
Actually, sex and chaotic spelling go nicely together – not difficult atol.
replying on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT 8 Mar 2005, 2:57 PM
Portently is from portent. Their tetherball and foursdquare games portend the kind of grownups they will become.
on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT 8 Mar 2005, 2:54 PM
If you're calling it Poet, Earth Mover, then maybe use bulldozer in the last line. Or you could call it Poet, Farmer.
replying on Beetwen by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 7:22 AM
That’s great that he was able to read it. Did he get all of the words, even metamorphose? Even if he didn’t, but figured out the way it works, that’s good for a fifth grader. Maybe they have an easier time of bringing order to chaos than we do.
replying on Beetwen by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 7:21 AM
Thanks, A.
replying on Beetwen by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 7:21 AM
I don’t know what painter you mean. Glad you understood it and got what I was saying in a cryptic way.
replying on Beetwen by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 7:20 AM
Metamorphose – yes. Bunk – no. Wingdings would make it completely illegible, and anyone can do that. I wanted it barely legible, with just enough pattern so the reader can see order in apparent chaos.
replying on Fastso by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 7:07 AM
I was hoping the reader would infer something about the woman from the last line - that being unliked herself, she understands the feelings this boy must have. Otherwise the poem would be merely a description of the fat boy, and the woman just an observer. You seem to see this. To say more about her would detract, I think, from the blunt focus on the fat boy, and overcomplicate the story.
replying on Fastso by Dovina 8 Mar 2005, 6:55 AM
To sweep clean the pavement because it is smelly. But I still think fat people are jollier on average than non-fat people, be they poor or not. I don’t know the reason for this, but is appears true.
on Disfigure by DevilBuni 7 Mar 2005, 3:44 PM
It's far fetched, but with enough truth to consider developing.
on Pilgrim by richa 7 Mar 2005, 3:41 PM
Snake heaven may have tall golden canes, but virgins for the Pilgrim Puritans? And that last verse with its semicolon and new sentence midway, well, look at the grammar.
on The Privaleged by i_am_the_popsicle 7 Mar 2005, 9:09 AM
I didn't get past the first verse due to spelling.
replying on Fastso by Dovina 7 Mar 2005, 8:49 AM
Funny, most of the ones I know seem jollier than the average person. Poor or not poor seems irrelevant.
replying on ...on the Benefits of Being Ugly by Goad 7 Mar 2005, 8:44 AM
Happy to hear you winced.
on You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee 7 Mar 2005, 8:42 AM
Except for some confusing spacing and "my phone calls are touching," which seems to change the focus, I like it.
replying on Fastso by Dovina 7 Mar 2005, 8:13 AM
Q1: edpeterson, as anyone can see.
Q2: A hierarchy of hunger is clearly shown in both Hunger poems, call it what you will.
Q3: It’s not about hell.
Q4: 0.75 +/- 0.20. 0 is clearly incorrect!
Q5: The only useful thing you’ve said in weeks.
Q6: I declare myself not sexist and not fatist.
replying on Fastso by Dovina 7 Mar 2005, 8:11 AM
I do apologize for the lipstich with its clearly gay implications for gang members. In the hierarchy of hunger it’s up there with “fatsist” and saying all fat people are not jolly. How do I keep coming up with such nonsense?
replying on Hunger 2 by Dovina 5 Mar 2005, 11:21 AM
On second thought – no.