I presume you call it sick because it is based on the Scripture of the Last Supper as recorded in the four Gospels. Frankly, I worried that some people would see it as belittling those accounts. I hoped to show the woman’s personal understanding and connection with that event, and through her own suffering, how she came to understand the way He symbolized his to his friends. I was intentionally ambiguous, leaving room for several interpretations. You have seen and reacted to one of them. I hope it will not be the only one as you reread it and try to understand my position.

I disagree on both simplicity and beauty. All the "The"s and "And"s detract. "has been darkened" If heaven lies, then the poem should say why or how. Granted it implies some things, but is vague and scattered. Soem good thoughts, just needs organization.

Thanks for your comments. I put the 'as's in the last two lines to show comparison rather than cause and effect, either way could work though. The first line switch might work, hmmmm.

Driven against my will,
In a lonesome Chevy,
Searching, despairing,
Tire tracks on the desert
Tire tracks on the seashore,
Surf beating uninhabited shore,
Many voices under the hood,
Heavy clouds,
Cold as death,
Promising as life.
I aim to please

True, but how do you show him who you are if he doesn't notice something first?

Am I mistaken? Surely not lass?

Thank you for clearing up the ambiguity people have noticed in this poem and for adding a delightful ending. It explains to anyone who might have been confused by my complex wording why “A Girls’ Climax” is achieved in being noticed by a fat, gay man, and why such a man noticed her.

Good evening, Mr. Ghost of Dan.

What happened to the comment by Dan garcia-Black and your response to it? I thought they were quite good.

Oh, hurry on, lad, you can make it!

I see a delightful comedy of ascending awareness in the three above comments, yours by far the best.

Coupled up or not, letting yourself go is fun and worthwhile sometimes. Depends on what you want at the time and in the long run.

In his effort to defend me, he simply wished to point out that I am a dunce of the second class, and that nobody is almighty enough to raise my rank any higher.

I enjoy independence from religious sponsorship, and for that perhaps you envy me, perhaps not. It was nice talking. Thanks.

To have the RIGHT answer to all of lif's questions is what I want. What I must be satisfied with in most cases is "to search in an absolutely honest (authentic) manner" for those answers. And the reason for my pathetic condition (which I mean honestly and without inentional insult)is that I envy your faith.