replying on Searching by dougsoderstrom
11 Jul 2004, 3:37 PM
Yes, the difference between seeking psychological security and facing reality. It's best to seek truth even if it hurts, or as you say, even if it is incomprensible. I like to think that some truth is actually out there to be found, or am I self deluded?
replying on Searching by dougsoderstrom
11 Jul 2004, 2:54 PM
At the risk of being called worse than "smug" couldn't the same be said for any religious position or even a political position. Is it any more than a way of bringing up the thing you want to talk about?
on Searching by dougsoderstrom
11 Jul 2004, 11:40 AM
True, but why do you search for an answer unsought?
replying on A Girlâs Climax by Dovina
11 Jul 2004, 11:34 AM
I look fabulous because he noticed. Exactly what he noticed or what the effect will be on my future dieting or makeup are yet to be figured out. Thanks for your comments.
on Innocence Having Been Lost by dougsoderstrom
10 Jul 2004, 2:22 PM
I usually yawn at this sort of political rant.
But it's not a bad rendition of a familiar chant
But it's not a bad rendition of a familiar chant
replying on The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina
10 Jul 2004, 7:23 AM
And mine. The conversation was insincere stabbing, getting even. Let's call this jab-voting and senseless slamming OFF.
replying on The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina
10 Jul 2004, 7:13 AM
Yeah, thanks, these are good suggestions on a kind of free-style, I haven't tried before. A kind of letting the thing out with the feeling of the moment, which of course is unprofessional.
on Mm, Shoes... ? by fevriere
9 Jul 2004, 4:13 PM
Not much better on rewrite. What really are you trying to say?
replying on A Child Once More by Quarton
9 Jul 2004, 11:09 AM
Teamwork, really?
on A Child Once More by Quarton
8 Jul 2004, 5:07 PM
Though quite touching in its meter and cozy reflection, some childhood recollections don't match up. For example, no "other's truths to embrace or reject," suggests I always agreed with my parents. And I had some "negative thoughts with which to cope." Sometimes I was not "unburdened by sorrow." Well, you get the point, and I'm getting yours - that adult life brings on an unwelcome complexity of worries. But maybe they're just more current.
on Sugared petrol isn't sweet if your ass is black & blue. by Y2kSlamPoet
8 Jul 2004, 2:13 PM
There's a category for Prose Poetry, but I disagree with putting this there. It's too long and too unpoetic even for prose poetry. Try a short story, posted elsewhere.
replying on A Piñon Limb by Dovina
8 Jul 2004, 11:15 AM
I was too embarrassed.
replying on A Piñon Limb by Dovina
8 Jul 2004, 10:38 AM
A frustrated poetess who conforms to a corset for the purpose of showing how silly she looks.
on Differences by gavinduff
8 Jul 2004, 10:35 AM
A good story. Some shortening might improve impact.
Verse 2 might go:
A tiny fly walks
In stale alcohol
And poignant tears
I dunno, play with it.
Verse 2 might go:
A tiny fly walks
In stale alcohol
And poignant tears
I dunno, play with it.
on Mm, Shoes... ? by fevriere
8 Jul 2004, 10:28 AM
"I am raw sugarcane for the eyes," is a great line. If only the others were. Line 2 is a question mark.
on Urbane Jane by MacFrantic
8 Jul 2004, 10:21 AM
I like it all but "confined to." why not give her a choice?
on I by D. $ Fontera
8 Jul 2004, 10:17 AM
Especially like, "All I have is desperation, and sometimes that's enough to get by on."
No standards! No promotions! Truth is the answer. Switch or stick, it's all 0.5 probability.