poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dovina (4421-4440) and replies

Comments byDovina, 4421–4440 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on A Piñon Limb by Dovina 8 Jul 2004, 10:02 AM
So do I. How is that?
replying on A Piñon Limb by Dovina 8 Jul 2004, 10:01 AM
A paradelle satirist.
replying on A Piñon Limb by Dovina 7 Jul 2004, 1:24 PM
Thanks, and I'll look for a meter tweak.
replying on Recycled Stardust by Quarton 6 Jul 2004, 5:57 PM
It's hard to answer from with this cloud of assumptions, like Galileo might have felt when asked about the sun's rising. I'm not anti-science, and think your outline is interesting.
replying on Recycled Stardust by Quarton 6 Jul 2004, 5:22 PM
No, that wasn't it at all, but again, thank you. If you ever have a question on a subject that I have expounded as fully as you've expounded here, don't hesitate to ask, and I'll try to answer just as helpfully.
replying on Translation by Dovina 6 Jul 2004, 4:11 PM
You can't actually believe it's so mathematically simple?
on Back Slidin' by Quarton 6 Jul 2004, 2:06 PM
Back slidin' runnin' away, back slidin' comin' home. Good rhythm , a kinda' country feelin'
replying on Recycled Stardust by Quarton 6 Jul 2004, 1:54 PM
You've been so helpful. Thank you so much!!!
on Recycled Stardust by Quarton 6 Jul 2004, 1:23 PM
May I interrupt long enough to ask any of you science people a question? I’m fascinated with the news story that a tiny piece of dust has actually been observed in two places at the same time, a dice-throwing kind of outcome even Einstein feared. I’m trying to find the person who witnessed this so I can thank him or her. It explains some things I’d like to incorporate into a poem. Who was that?
on Bankruptcy (2) by INTRANSIT 6 Jul 2004, 12:56 PM
Run when the lions are lethargic. Good.
I think you mean lions' shade.
replying on Homeless by gavinduff 6 Jul 2004, 11:40 AM
Speaking from Paris, a dubius distance from France, I agree that the last verse is a good stand-alone poem, but the first two stories don't match up, so commenting in general on the "poem" I'd have to say it's more of a line-broken story.
replying on Paradelle of Progress by Dovina 6 Jul 2004, 11:00 AM
A 10 is quite acceptable, considering that I did not yield to the temptation of breaking out, even in the slightest, from the constraint of paradelle, and have at least attempted to provide your burning ears with the utmost in poetic accomplishment.
on Urbane Jane by MacFrantic 6 Jul 2004, 10:53 AM
Better.
replying on Homeless by gavinduff 6 Jul 2004, 9:52 AM
Are we saying the same thing in divergent ways, or pushing toward different objectives?
on Homeless by gavinduff 6 Jul 2004, 9:26 AM
Some punctuation would help. The first verse tells us he is ignorant, then you show us. Better to just tell the story, I think. This is a bit like a story, broken up into lines.
replying on Rainbow by TwilightDawned 5 Jul 2004, 6:13 PM
Thank you.
replying on Paradelle of Progress by Dovina 5 Jul 2004, 4:59 PM
Thanks for illuminating darkness on a thing I thought single-minded, if not classy. Naive me.
on Forbidden by Chasz Misleading 5 Jul 2004, 3:24 PM
Good, especially verse 2.
on Graveyards by TwilightDawned 5 Jul 2004, 3:19 PM
"alive" at the end adds several variations
Line 2: "that draws my vision"
Good
replying on Rainbow by TwilightDawned 5 Jul 2004, 2:58 PM
Kites washing away sorrow.
dimming in to the darkness