on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey
16 Jun 2006, 7:39 AM
You've got a great idea here. I'll say what they often say to me. Make it more poetic! Take these thoughts and form the words into pleasing and provocative lines.
on Ice by MacFrantic
16 Jun 2006, 7:35 AM
I like this and relate to it, but can't say why. "Spending your luck" as is yours is mine to spend - alright, thought provoking. And to remember winter while pondering it in November is long-range thinking. And obstacles as "growing holes in my frozen face" - yep, I get that.
replying on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove
16 Jun 2006, 7:26 AM
Is this the only excuse for an arguement left on dying Poemranker? If Edna did not routinely delete every response she can't smear with shit, I might get involved. This is ridiculous.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
16 Jun 2006, 7:21 AM
DA's only been banged by a door post on the head while blundering through the simplest of responses to Poemranker comments.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
15 Jun 2006, 8:01 PM
Well, I see, after a long absence that we're all back in form like goslings after a long-necked mother. This god / no-god debate is always fun and good for slander. Amanda finds God in the slightest natural change, while Dark Angel finds Him not even in the biggest of bangs. I think He's the lovliest entity I can imagine.
Poemranker seems in the throws of death, like some great beast becoming extinct for lack of adaptation. And Edna Sourlove is no help. We need the rank smell of blood around this place.
Poemranker seems in the throws of death, like some great beast becoming extinct for lack of adaptation. And Edna Sourlove is no help. We need the rank smell of blood around this place.
on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
15 Jun 2006, 7:53 PM
It's an uplifting verse for church and friendly settings like greeting cards. As such, the rhythm and rhyme should be consistent, which they mostly are.
on Whispers to Isabelle by Caducus
1 Jun 2006, 7:40 AM
This looking back and seeing him in every reflection and distorted mirror image has got to stop. You're no help with that. Good poem.
on Herencia Latina by Ranger
1 Jun 2006, 7:36 AM
Welcome back. You didn't miss much.
Have you been in school or some whorehouse in Mexico? Sorry, had to ask after reading the Latin soulish tone of this. Are red lights still used to show she's open for business? That was my first impression, but you've left a Heisenberg uncertainty that could kill a cat. Maybe you mean "June" not "lune."
"Your heritage upon my fingertips" good line.
Have you been in school or some whorehouse in Mexico? Sorry, had to ask after reading the Latin soulish tone of this. Are red lights still used to show she's open for business? That was my first impression, but you've left a Heisenberg uncertainty that could kill a cat. Maybe you mean "June" not "lune."
"Your heritage upon my fingertips" good line.
on Witch hanging at Dunchurch by Mona Lisa
23 May 2006, 11:03 AM
An historical event like this requires, in my opinion, a longer development, prior to the punch line. A more flowing form might work better.
replying on Godproof Hat by Dovina
23 May 2006, 10:39 AM
Buddahism is a godproof hat, or tries to be, because it stands in for religion, relieving its followers from the almighty.
replying on Godproof Hat by Dovina
23 May 2006, 10:36 AM
The last stanza reminds me of a conversation between a forest ranger, a maker of gold, and a love-torn woman seeking shelter from the ravages of persistant atheism fighting in some netherworld against the forces of an almighty.
on Still Air Sticks by Sunny
21 May 2006, 12:15 PM
Well, this doesn't deserve a 1, even if does have some problems. I've voted higher that it deserves just to average out Edna, who hasn't a clue.
I don't know how she bellowed from morrows, which are future days.
I don't know how she bellowed from morrows, which are future days.
on A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove
21 May 2006, 12:08 PM
I repeat: "Do you always delete comments before you reply to them?" If you want feedback here, get with the fricking program!!!