Comments byDovina, 1321–1340 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 3:50 PM
1A because with only me and 199 of my friends left in the US, admit it, the country would be a lot better off.
replying on There by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 3:46 PM
After you've made it there, made it to hell, and retrieved the woody, take a good hard look at your life and ask yourself if maybe there was another prayer you would rather have God answer than, "God I'm going to hell for that one."
on Under the Spoon by MacFrantic 2 Mar 2006, 3:37 PM
I like it, except for the Alligator. It's light, humorous, and humerus. (Hey, you can have that free.) Smooth up the flow a bit and go.
replying on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 8:33 AM
Very profound. We could carry on a long conversation like this.
replying on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 8:31 AM
Oh well, it was a stab in the dark, so to speak.
replying on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 8:18 AM
I can, but I won't say. We have impressionable children here who could be led into sin. My next poem is entitled "The Private Life of an Alchemist."
replying on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 8:11 AM
Give yourself some more harsh criticism. But thanks for the 10, I need a lotta help here.
replying on A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger 2 Mar 2006, 7:48 AM
Ranger, you can visualize him right now slapping himself with harsh criticism, bleeding about the head and shouolders for his Freudian Irrestibility - the insatiable inability to resist saying the first phallic-symoled thing on his mind.
replying on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina 2 Mar 2006, 7:34 AM
Actually, yes. Admittedly it's weird, but for me it has meaning.
replying on A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger 1 Mar 2006, 4:47 PM
Ranger will be appalled, won't he?
replying on There by Dovina 1 Mar 2006, 4:44 PM
You probably told her that God can't make plastic. And she probably said He can, just ask Dovina. And you probably said Dovina is is unqualified to say. And she probably said, "Dovina has a plastic crucifix." So take that an admit to being ovulated.
replying on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger 1 Mar 2006, 4:41 PM
with you, the force is. But of the dark side beware. Angels dark, that is.
on A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger 1 Mar 2006, 4:38 PM
The title is very appealing, but the delivery? - well. He is apparently like Atlas, has his own telescope, but unlike telescopes, his is not a receiver of light, but a beacon lit. "Thin gold ring"? - brass maybe. Cocerels are young male chickens, which do not crow like the roosters they become.

Still, the astronomer dying at dawn is a good image, which perhaps you can build upon.
replying on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger 1 Mar 2006, 4:25 PM
An un-Yodaesque comment that is.
replying on There by Dovina 1 Mar 2006, 4:23 PM
I did that years ago, almost in a former life, by lying in the sand at Long Beach. No, face it, all is vanity. There is nothing new under the sun.
replying on There by Dovina 1 Mar 2006, 4:17 PM
Having arrived at the ultimate meaning for your life, may I suggest giving up. Yes, admit that amanda_dcosta was right all along.
on Pine Boxes (revised) by Joe-joe 1 Mar 2006, 10:45 AM
Don't you mean "reign" in line 2? And why add "supreme"? Am I repeating myself?
replying on There by Dovina 1 Mar 2006, 10:43 AM
But I did that yesterday.
replying on There by Dovina 1 Mar 2006, 10:34 AM
I did that, had a drink, then took one horribly disappointing step in the direction of Robert Frost.
replying on There by Dovina 1 Mar 2006, 10:33 AM
There's a child there, alright. I see her in the distance, unable to stand or feed herself. No, really, I see your point. Thanks.