replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 8:00 PM
The word "that" makes it not a sentence.
on greymo(u)rn by lmp
5 Jan 2006, 7:41 PM
Some nice thoughts here. It's a prose poem at best. Not free verse. As a short story it might be better.
I see no reason for not introducing a Short Story category, under 500 words.
I see no reason for not introducing a Short Story category, under 500 words.
on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 7:29 PM
A lovely, fanciful expression. I think "emerald dress that stretches to the horizon’s hem" would sound better and become grammatical as "emerald dress stretches to horizon’s hem"
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
5 Jan 2006, 1:30 PM
I read “The Corrections” by Jonathan Franzen a couple of years ago, the same author who wrote “My Father’s Brain” which you cited and in which he quotes David Shenk. “The Corrections” deals with old age issues and may contain some of the same language David Shenk used. I’d have to go through it again to know. What I do know is that phrases stick in my head and tend to come out in my writing even if I read them years before. Of course, you always assume the worst and call it the most logical.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
5 Jan 2006, 11:01 AM
I did not know about that book. Nothing is copied.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
5 Jan 2006, 10:51 AM
I did not know about that book. Nothing is copied.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
5 Jan 2006, 6:20 AM
I think it's easier to improve ability than to improve imagination.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:51 PM
And a vivid imagination comes with the territory, I see. Enviable in a way.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:49 PM
Only zodiac and dark angel have no contradictions.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:11 PM
I'm sorry then. Were you really serious about spelling tongue as "tounge" several times running?
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:08 PM
To say you were offended is illgical, given history as it is.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:06 PM
You can't be serious, spelling it that way three times in a row? You were puloling my . . .er, ah .. .leg.
replying on We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT
4 Jan 2006, 3:02 PM
Make that Alto, and I should.
replying on light [edited] by lmp
4 Jan 2006, 1:40 PM
I love this kind of question. It makes me feel so vulnerable and defensive. So, of course, I must answer, no.
replying on light [edited] by lmp
4 Jan 2006, 1:38 PM
But 18 is. I count, therefore I am. If I were here, I would see it and swoon.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 1:28 PM
Nor does mine. I was trying to portray the feeling of having forgotten all the connections that “paste” each new sensation to the known world. As he lost that ability, everything seems new and “unpasted.” But I agree that the last line may be over-the-top, and could be scratched.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 1:22 PM
It's always the worst offenders who complain the most about the same offense in others.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 1:21 PM
Since I'm female and do not have a tounge, "you" is hardly the right pronoun. You might as well tell me how paste feels on a penis.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
3 Jan 2006, 3:45 PM
For this reason God made two heavens - one for those who speak in tongues,and one for those who hoped the laws of physics would change. Go to babblefish.com for translation.
replying on Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe
3 Jan 2006, 3:30 PM
Do you mean "A Proclamation to Our Lord"?