replying on Privacy Compromised by Dovina
3 Jan 2006, 3:27 PM
Close to right. Tom is the rare one who gets it right.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
3 Jan 2006, 3:22 PM
It's a Tower of Babel then.
replying on Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe
3 Jan 2006, 3:20 PM
Careful, the Teacher is watching.
replying on Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe
3 Jan 2006, 3:14 PM
No, I flunked out of that school on the first day. It's not sarcasm really. I was just thinking about the various ways to interpret it.
replying on light [edited] by lmp
3 Jan 2006, 3:11 PM
I hope you taped it to her and she read it upon awakening. Then she would not answer as I did.
on Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe
3 Jan 2006, 3:04 PM
Unless you mean something very annoying, try "pigtailed."
on light [edited] by lmp
3 Jan 2006, 2:57 PM
I can't picture it. Sorry.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
3 Jan 2006, 2:54 PM
I cannot claim typoness for pasteless, but must revert to someotherness, which zodiac will explain to you. Actually, your child unpasting his thoughts from the world is a good definition.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
3 Jan 2006, 2:53 PM
What does “paste-tounge” mean, oh thou of nondictionaryless words?
on Claim to Call by MacFrantic
3 Jan 2006, 11:55 AM
I like the idea of this, "Shouting for a sight to see" when the realization stikes "a claim to call on the silence of our memories" as a better thing to do than looking for some sight to see. Maybe that's not what you meant, but I like it.
on Half Hearted by elderking
3 Jan 2006, 11:48 AM
The rhymes seem mostly unforced, and the first verse is good. Verses 2 and 3 add little to the meaning, and they flow less well.
on you clinker by celticskatermatt1
3 Jan 2006, 11:44 AM
forced rhymes.
on This Is Me by PoeticXTC
3 Jan 2006, 11:43 AM
Spelling, punctuation, grammar!!
on Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe
3 Jan 2006, 11:35 AM
"bobby sock pick tailed girls" I won't even ask.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
3 Jan 2006, 11:31 AM
We seem to agree on the meaning of fuzzy logic, but that is, of course, an overwrought assumption, not to be agreed with.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
3 Jan 2006, 11:12 AM
No answer, eh?
on Goodbye Sad Door by woodstock20000
2 Jan 2006, 4:47 PM
I like this a lot, up to near the end. Try ending it like this:
and so I continue to
knock
at the iron door
I don't think the rest of it helps.
and so I continue to
knock
at the iron door
I don't think the rest of it helps.
on Construction Lot (edit) by zodiac
2 Jan 2006, 4:39 PM
The comma in "across the lot, the city sways" seems misplaced, as if it should be two sentences, either a period after trash, or after lot.
The dash in march-wind can go I think.
In the last verse, you start with "we" and switch jarringly to "I" as if the collective opinion affects what you believe.
The mirror makes it feel like flying away to something no better that the city with its faults. Maybe that's what you wanted, or maybe another word, not mirror. Also, "could step out and away" seems cluttered and reducible without ill effect to "step away . . ."
The dash in march-wind can go I think.
In the last verse, you start with "we" and switch jarringly to "I" as if the collective opinion affects what you believe.
The mirror makes it feel like flying away to something no better that the city with its faults. Maybe that's what you wanted, or maybe another word, not mirror. Also, "could step out and away" seems cluttered and reducible without ill effect to "step away . . ."
on We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT
2 Jan 2006, 12:12 PM
Depressing. Take a long walk.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
2 Jan 2006, 12:10 PM
Fuzzy logic:
1. I'm taller than everybody.
2. My brother is six feet tall.
3. Therefore, I'm taller than my brother.
The fuzzy-logic word here is “therefore.” Without it, No. 3 would be perfectly logical, and your assertion of its illogic absurd. But “therefore” is not totally illogical since it works with Statement 1, and No.2 is irrelevant. Read it without No. 2, and it means the same thing.
Illogic:
Dovina is a moron because she cites 1 + 1 = 2 as evidence for a logical God.
1. I'm taller than everybody.
2. My brother is six feet tall.
3. Therefore, I'm taller than my brother.
The fuzzy-logic word here is “therefore.” Without it, No. 3 would be perfectly logical, and your assertion of its illogic absurd. But “therefore” is not totally illogical since it works with Statement 1, and No.2 is irrelevant. Read it without No. 2, and it means the same thing.
Illogic:
Dovina is a moron because she cites 1 + 1 = 2 as evidence for a logical God.