Comments byDovina, 1701–1720 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Nightfall by Niphredil 1 Jan 2006, 7:19 PM
Oh well.
replying on A Shortcut to Summer by Enkidu 1 Jan 2006, 4:24 PM
Yes, of course. Using second person consistently is a good method. So why the last verse? Why not: "Green the spring . . ."
replying on For Love of Baseball by Dovina 1 Jan 2006, 4:10 PM
Very funny.
replying on Nightfall by Niphredil 1 Jan 2006, 4:02 PM
I presume you mean uhuru, freedom, an African word. Yes I could use more of that. With his explanation it makes more sense, but without it, I am still lying under a swaying cedar tree with snow on its branches, in the dark, in the daytime, unaffected by falling snow.
on A Shortcut to Summer by Enkidu 1 Jan 2006, 9:03 AM
Wound the world?
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 1 Jan 2006, 8:48 AM
Have you stuck gum between your Y and T keys, or is it chewing tobacco?
on loved once by celticskatermatt1 1 Jan 2006, 7:42 AM
"again"
leave out "once"
Very sketchy, but good.
on Half of All My Lies are True by Enkidu 1 Jan 2006, 7:40 AM
I know a passionate man who speaks in apparent lies and nonsense to let me know his feelings, because feelings mean more to him than making sense. If this is something like what you want to say, I think you could refine it into something more compelling.
on Unspoken by Heather2119 1 Jan 2006, 7:34 AM
Good material for a poem here. You just need to write a poem about it, and get the grammar straight.
on Nightfall by Niphredil 1 Jan 2006, 7:33 AM
"Darkling" means "in the dark." So how can the day grow dimmer when it's already dark? Also, if the cedar tree is snowy, and it's branches sway in the breeze, why is there no mention of snow falling in the face of someone lying under it?

It flows well, but I can't get past illogic.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 1 Jan 2006, 7:21 AM
I think we should functionalize it: K + L = W. Then we could say that W - L + K or L = W - K. Maybe God would be pleased with that since it presents several propositions that we can test logically.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 31 Dec 2005, 3:27 PM
Yes, you never said that you do not feel God's presence. I assumed that from your comments. Many things about God don't make sense logically as you say. But many more don't make sense to me without considering His presence. Your paradox is the same as mine. I feel His presence with an emotional awareness that can be shot in the head with logic. Yet, I don't understand him. The idea of Jes'us - just for us - appeals to me because it makes God personal, and not just for us, but for anyone who believes. But belief is harder than logic for me, so I try to merge the two and imagine logic as a part of God or his creatioin. I hope he understands me, because few others do.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 31 Dec 2005, 2:46 PM
Show me a queen who ever gained her title democratically. I think the use of "her" eliminates the queens Intransit is talking about.
replying on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 31 Dec 2005, 7:07 AM
You left out servant-hearted in your description. Oh, I know, you have it, she doesn't.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 31 Dec 2005, 7:02 AM
Alchemy, she is saying that God is real to her because she feels his presence and sees his action in her life. You are saying that you do not feel him and do not witness his presence in your life. Therefore you want logical reasons for God. You cite Jusus' logic when He was here on earth. And you recall the bad actioins of people who claimed to be following God as they flew airplanes into buildings. But Amanda has found the true God, while the 911 terrorists have not. I know this because her God brings love, joy, and peace, while theirs brings hate and war. You could argue that Amanda's God brings tsunamis and earthquakes, and maybe he does. Maybe Amanda has an answer for that, I don't. And to say that everyone who claims to follow the true God, really does, is ludicrous. But listen to Amanda because she comes closer than most.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 31 Dec 2005, 6:43 AM
Just one of your many logical mistakes in this arguement is deducing that anyone said that God exists because things are logical.
on Desperate Season by Sisterwolf 30 Dec 2005, 5:02 PM
I felt good about this, felt their dismay, until the last verse. Then summer's suddenness seemed as if it should remain in their minds as a hope, not a reality quite yet.

I also think "Dark, withdrawn and without joy" is too strong for an ordinary winter. And "terror" also seems demeaning of people who know the seasons.
replying on My Interesting Life by Dovina 30 Dec 2005, 4:50 PM
"Crazy Diamond" Yes, why not? Thanks!
replying on It's Time by PoeticXTC 30 Dec 2005, 4:46 PM
Nor did I. Deference all the way!
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta 30 Dec 2005, 3:14 PM
You know women better than him? Wow, I won't even count the ways that could be taken. Oh, yes - in the most positive way.

I won't speculate on your motives for arguing this issue so long and hard with zodiac. As for not changing anything, I was considering a new username: Queen_of_the_Logical_Universe.