replying on Better Off Dead by wilco
9 Dec 2005, 11:25 AM
You may have noticed that I no longer comment on DancingShamrock's poems except for occasional one-liners. That's because she has a history of deleting comments. You are starting to show the same kind of record, to which I can only say that yiu'll get few comments from me unless you stop at once! Even if yiu revise a poem, and the comments aeem no longer relavent, do not delete them, unless yiu no longer wish to see my comments. I speak only for myself.
replying on Better Off Dead by wilco
7 Dec 2005, 4:56 PM
E played in C?
replying on Count All the Stars by TLRufener
7 Dec 2005, 4:54 PM
Yep. Either way's about as easy.
on Better Off Dead by wilco
7 Dec 2005, 3:57 PM
It has a lot of good images and lines, but the comfort of logic is mostly lacking, at least for me. Don't get me wrong, the thing doesn't have to add up to be good, it just does more for me if I find answers to questions like, How is she saved from how life ends up when you’re all alone?
replying on Count All the Stars by TLRufener
7 Dec 2005, 2:42 PM
I'll have to give him credit for this unusual display of documentation for his usually exterporaneous arguements. I believe he actually copied each of these lines from the poem and placed it in Google's Advanced Search, under "Exact Phrase" and hit "Search." The total number of sites containing that line becomes his basis for cliche rating.
on YOUR OWN PLEASURE by Zoe
6 Dec 2005, 7:31 PM
It’s not strictly paradelle, which has only four stanzas compared to your eight. Nor does your last stanza contain all of the words in the above stanzas. Nor is it two paradelles, because the fourth stanza does not contain all the words in the above four. Still, it’s a good poem and holds the thoughts together in spite of a very constraining form.
It is certainly better than http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?i
It is certainly better than http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?i
on laugh again by skaskowski
6 Dec 2005, 1:04 PM
How can the rim of a coin be a mobius strip? What metaphor?
on The Incubation by oneglove
6 Dec 2005, 1:00 PM
Wordy in places, but good. The long lines could be shortened or cut.
replying on Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW
6 Dec 2005, 12:49 PM
I count wondering as two syllables
replying on Irish Holliday by Dovina
6 Dec 2005, 12:44 PM
Yes, my belssings are duely counted. I saw a flatbed with a little toy fire engine strapped neatly to the otherwise empty bed
and wondered if it was you going home for the holidays.
and wondered if it was you going home for the holidays.
replying on Irish Holliday by Dovina
6 Dec 2005, 12:41 PM
Wrong on all three counts as usual. Happy Holidays!
replying on Irish Holliday by Dovina
6 Dec 2005, 12:39 PM
Actually he's too big to go in the laundry. "Would he'd fit" is Irish for "I would that he would fit."
Merry Christmas, Al, but your poem is blasphemous!
Merry Christmas, Al, but your poem is blasphemous!
on Popular Lovers by wilco
4 Dec 2005, 1:42 PM
It seems you're comparing a mill (sawmill, gristmill) to a run down apartment, or vice versa. Other than that confusion, it's cool.
on Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW
4 Dec 2005, 1:33 PM
She sat there staring
at our old pictures wondering
who was living then
at our old pictures wondering
who was living then
replying on Due Consideration by Dovina
2 Dec 2005, 1:43 PM
No assumption implied. Try hard. It's not that difficult.
replying on Due Consideration by Dovina
2 Dec 2005, 1:40 PM
1 + 1 = 0? That kind of math?