on Remember by psychedelic
8 Aug 2004, 9:33 AM
very chocolate boxy
on California triolets by zodiac
30 Jul 2004, 4:54 PM
very nicely done
on Outhouse by newagepoet2000
30 Jul 2004, 4:55 PM
Hmmm interesting thoughts, bet I know where you were when you thought of this one.................
on some deleted poem
14 Jul 2004, 2:08 PM
I think the edit maybe could do with a little editing, still very nice
on Eros, and Psycho by horus8
14 Jul 2004, 2:10 PM
Very enjoyable
on One Lump Or Two? by OneFingerAnswer
14 Jul 2004, 2:12 PM
Liked this one................
on some deleted poem
5 Jul 2004, 2:09 PM
I love this, it seems to be the best of yours I have read on here so far
on some deleted poem
5 Jul 2004, 3:22 AM
actually this is classed as a senryu, the haiku is specifically for nature related poems, same syllable count, also the syllable count on this is wrong, you have 6 in the first line, 8 in the second and 5 in the third,
traditional haiku is 5,7,5 although condensed haiku are very popular, sorry, but this is not a haiku
traditional haiku is 5,7,5 although condensed haiku are very popular, sorry, but this is not a haiku
on EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
5 Jul 2004, 7:20 AM
A very interesting piece, a style I have not seen before, are we saying what we would like for dinner? hehehehe......... very funny.............
on The Western World by mrpresident
4 Jul 2004, 1:06 AM
I really like this, it tells of someone who is stuck maybe in a dead end job and just ants to be free........
Wobderful............
Wobderful............
on some deleted poem
4 Jul 2004, 3:47 AM
I must say, the language from the previous commentor was uncalled for, although slightly overdone, I would say this has the potential if edited to be a really good poem.....................