on some deleted poem
24 May 2005, 10:33 AM
Not great, but saved by the ending.
on Ungrateful by Damien_
24 May 2005, 10:45 AM
"I am Ungrateful,
Ungratefully....
That's simply fucking awful, man.
Ungratefully....
That's simply fucking awful, man.
on Perfect place by gothiclovepoetiss
13 Jun 2005, 6:55 AM
Not very goth...try rewriting it with different words..and a different theme...and change the title...that would make it better in my opinion.
on I want you by nicole081083
13 Jun 2005, 6:57 AM
Write this from the point of view of a Rwandan refugee and you've got something.
on Mr. Campbell's final journey by jroday
14 Jun 2005, 10:45 AM
feet are bare, not bear....unless maybe they're really hairy, in which case you might try something like Hobbit feet.
So, this guy did something bad enough to get the chair for it and he's going to heaven...I'll never understand Christianity..you get to do whatever you want to do, and as long as you say you're sorry, you still get to go to heaven. YAHOO
So, this guy did something bad enough to get the chair for it and he's going to heaven...I'll never understand Christianity..you get to do whatever you want to do, and as long as you say you're sorry, you still get to go to heaven. YAHOO
on Books by sacred_poet_me
14 Jun 2005, 10:49 AM
This has been said much better on those posters at the local library that say "Reading Is Super".
on Beach Volleyball by lil_evil_boi
14 Jun 2005, 10:52 AM
If you're any older that 7 or 8, this is terrible.
on some deleted poem
16 Jun 2005, 10:59 AM
First off, as someone who is sitting in a cubicle at this very moment, I can tell you that the world is not, in fact, a cubicle. Also, the Earth is round and therefore by very definition cannot be a cubicle. So, that part doesn't make any sense.
Second, you rant and rave and basically tell me that I'm an idiot and that you are the most advanced human being on the planet? That's an out of control ego right there, chief.
Second, you rant and rave and basically tell me that I'm an idiot and that you are the most advanced human being on the planet? That's an out of control ego right there, chief.
on Eternal Pain by lil_evil_boi
22 Jun 2005, 8:52 AM
Assignment: Read this to whoever it's for. If you get all the way through it without them A) Shooting themselves or B) shooting you, I'll give you a 10.
on My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit
5 Jul 2005, 8:49 AM
I love how you left the misspelling in to illustrate the lack of education in Africa. That's great.
on Our Soldiers by Lenore
6 Jul 2005, 8:22 AM
Actually, I think this isn't bad. Don't like the last line, but whatever.
on Mother Earth by TLRufener
6 Jul 2005, 8:26 AM
Lose everything but this:
Mother Earth
Has gone to sleep.
Lamenting, the wind
Wails and weeps.
Mother Earth
Has gone to sleep.
Lamenting, the wind
Wails and weeps.
on some deleted poem
6 Jul 2005, 8:09 AM
I'm not much for puns and I have my doubts about whether you came up with these, but i'm gonna give you a 4 just for "anal flossing".
on Close to my Heart by Chelsio
6 Jul 2005, 8:12 AM
Ok, this is not great, but for 13 years old I'll say it's not bad.
on I Need Not be Told by Chelsio
6 Jul 2005, 8:13 AM
better than your other one, I'll give you that.
on Because to Live I Must by TLRufener
6 Jul 2005, 8:14 AM
A trip to Salem, you must take.
on Born and Fed by Dovina
6 Jul 2005, 8:17 AM
Quite frankly, it's just boring.
on Promise Me by Taco
6 Jul 2005, 8:19 AM
bleeech.