great poem brennan... I felt the emotion with each line 10 for ya :o)

Great poem vulcan!

A great show of emotions here... and I hope that you don't listen to some of the crude critics of this site katie. I'm sure that you're mother would be proud of you... Good job! :o)

Such suffering and sorrow... a dark but great poem Katie! 10 for ya! :o)

All I can say is... woah... dark and powerful words... a great poem indeed :o)

such a dark feeling... to have your personal demons destroying every bit of your being... I relived the pain I went through but i promise, the pain will pass. great poem :o)

I understand the pain you have gone through in this poem hon... but rest assured, the one whom you seek, you shall find and happiness eternal, you shall roam free :o) Great Poem!!

heartbreak is such a rough thing to go through... but don't worry, something better will come to you... great poem by the way :o)

I can understand where you're coming from... this is a great country but the ideals which make it great have been distorted... a nation of peace yet so much hatred fills the air, so much pain... government bound to help the people, but more worried about themselves... so much anger envisioned of the problems we face today... let me be the first since no one who commented had the guts to say, without the sarcasm... good poem Pink Punk Kisses

wow... I slowly read the poem, gaining the picture in my mind... first I thought you watched him while he slept but then I was thrown at the end... it's a good poem :o) And furthermore, I apologize for the childish responses I read after this poem... you're a good poet and I look forward to more of your work :o)

I like this poem... It's as if your thoughts were just poured out... then given form... 10 for the dark one :o)