on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams
17 Jan 2005, 11:42 AM
Then would you give me a suggestion on how to better this poem?
replying on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams
17 Jan 2005, 11:25 AM
the only point i was trying to make was this person who feels alone , mind you he's a bum is watching the world pass him by. He is envious at first. Untill he realizes the people "laughing hyenas" are all fake, and that their life is fake. So he now has peace in his own skin--not plastic and with a life full of lies
on A Picture For Danny by Caducus
17 Jan 2005, 11:19 AM
I always love reading your poems, you actully inspired me to me write one of my poems 'Religious Slaughter'. But this by far the best poem I have read by you :)
replying on In the Shadows by Beyond_Dreams
15 Jan 2005, 3:00 PM
I had a different ending to this but I wasn't sure if it dragged on where it could have ended where I have ended it. The original ending made it not so much of a romantic poem and i thought it gave to much away.
on Blue Executioner by Caducus
6 Jan 2005, 9:39 AM
nicely written
replying on Forgotten Strokes by Beyond_Dreams
21 Dec 2004, 1:52 PM
I had to edit it about the blank canvas part. Other wise you have to look past the "canvas" part of the poem. It's about a person depressed trying to fit in "palette decorated" her makeup "nightmarish dreams" gothic
Her memories are of before with the evening dining and star lit sparkled eyes. That describes her old memories of joy. Manifested demons trying unworldly times.....nothing is going right. Her tears over flowing into the puddle sheâs all alone.....
Her memories are of before with the evening dining and star lit sparkled eyes. That describes her old memories of joy. Manifested demons trying unworldly times.....nothing is going right. Her tears over flowing into the puddle sheâs all alone.....
replying on Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams
21 Dec 2004, 10:51 AM
'tumulus' is spelled correctly
replying on Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams
20 Dec 2004, 10:52 PM
Thank you :)
on Interstellar Hell by PsydewaysTears
20 Dec 2004, 9:48 PM
I thought this poem portrayed the meaning very well....It's pretty obvious you're talking about your feelings, 'But I've learned to black out the sky'--Meaning you are holding back and forgetting, almost like one pushes into the darkness of their mind "pain".
This is how I found the poem to be...Maybe a little easily read for me. I mean it has a nice forefront but the inner being of it has been said a million times by other poets. The idea wasn't very original.
Over all though I liked it
This is how I found the poem to be...Maybe a little easily read for me. I mean it has a nice forefront but the inner being of it has been said a million times by other poets. The idea wasn't very original.
Over all though I liked it
replying on Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams
20 Dec 2004, 6:28 PM
Are you referring to the spelling?
replying on Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams
20 Dec 2004, 6:24 PM
It's not so much Iraq specifically but Iraq is a good example. It's more of a general outlook on the world right now and state of it.
replying on Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams
20 Dec 2004, 4:41 PM
It's sad that the events in history, where so many people died was about the religious crusades and even sadder is the fact that it is about to happen again, and the thoughts behind it came to mind as I watch the news daily.
I hope that gave you little insight on this poem.
I hope that gave you little insight on this poem.