on A Wanderlust To The New by fevriere
21 Dec 2004, 10:31 PM
Okay, a bit cheesy but nice work!! Just the rhyme needs a little more work. You start with abcb and end up with aaaa. Anyways, hanks for reading mine. I've posted a new one too. Look at it if you have the chance.
on Into My World by sliver
21 Dec 2004, 7:43 AM
Renee Blue Eyes!! Dedication your love surely!!
Flowed pretty well towards the end but there was something wrong with the flow initially. Honestly, the 2nd line needs work.
Good work though, I love acrostics. I have many of my own. Hopefully I'd post them soon.
Flowed pretty well towards the end but there was something wrong with the flow initially. Honestly, the 2nd line needs work.
Good work though, I love acrostics. I have many of my own. Hopefully I'd post them soon.
on Into My World by sliver
21 Dec 2004, 7:45 AM
I meant to put "Dedication TO your love...". A typo!!
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 7:55 AM
Okay, that's not bad, not bad at all. But it could be made better with some more uniformity in your stanzas. The flow breaks a little too often!!
on Marrowless highway by INTRANSIT
21 Dec 2004, 7:56 AM
Wow!! That's indeed one of the most unique poems I've read in any of the poetry sites. Not flawless definitely, but better than most stuff.
on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin
21 Dec 2004, 7:57 AM
Love the weave of words. Check me out if you could!!
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 8:03 AM
The rhymes are kinda not very uniform. Nice imagery though!! A 7 from me!!
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 8:09 AM
Kinda cliched!! No offences but I have just read too much of these stuff lately. The expression is just about fine though!!
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 8:12 AM
That took me around 20 minutes!! Very impressive work, indeed!!!
on DJ Bling Bling spins authenticity by Jeremi B. Handrinos
21 Dec 2004, 8:13 AM
Nice!! Haikius could be challenging. Well pulled off!!
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 8:13 AM
That's bloody cruel!! A 7 from me!!
on DJ Bling Bling spins authenticity by Jeremi B. Handrinos
21 Dec 2004, 8:14 AM
Haikus**
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 10:39 PM
A very heart-felt dedication but a chest-nut nevertheless. You could have done better to avoid cliches. Anyways, a 6 from me and I hope you'd check me out too.
on Recognition by nentwined
21 Dec 2004, 10:44 PM
I can't get you. Either I am intellectually challenged or this is crap. I rust your abilities, so I settle for the former conclusion. Do check me out. A 5 as a benefit of doubt!!