i like this - it actually reminds me of something i wrote - in fact the theme is very similar
(perhaps great minds think alike?) :)
you could make it a little bit better if you sharped some of the edges and played with your word choice, but it is overall very nicely done - 9 -
-megan
(perhaps great minds think alike?) :)
you could make it a little bit better if you sharped some of the edges and played with your word choice, but it is overall very nicely done - 9 -
-megan
on The Artist by Dreammaker1024
10 Mar 2005, 1:28 PM
i really really like this you tell it well
-megan
p.s. - you are here because you obviously like to wright poetry - so i ask you this
why not put her name in the books and the learned memory of those around the world?
-megan
p.s. - you are here because you obviously like to wright poetry - so i ask you this
why not put her name in the books and the learned memory of those around the world?
on Resurrection by Dreammaker1024
10 Mar 2005, 1:22 PM
i like this but it is a bit too much all at once
i think that the concrete block of words may make people less likely to read it - perhaps if you broke if up into verses or stanzas
regardless it was good -
megan
i think that the concrete block of words may make people less likely to read it - perhaps if you broke if up into verses or stanzas
regardless it was good -
megan
on Harvester of Sorrow by frdup717
10 Mar 2005, 1:14 PM
nice - i like this alot -
-megan
-megan
i like this - but i must say i disagree
the answers are never in any one else but yourself, and if you are not finding them then you may not be ready to know -
but i don't think, even though we would all like to believe otherwise, that the answers can be found in any other person
-megan
the answers are never in any one else but yourself, and if you are not finding them then you may not be ready to know -
but i don't think, even though we would all like to believe otherwise, that the answers can be found in any other person
-megan
on Thundershowers and my best friend by NeeMan
7 Mar 2005, 5:53 PM
i absolutely love this 100%! - 10 -
-megan
-megan
on A Sonnet for Barbara by PatColvin
7 Mar 2005, 5:46 PM
it is nice as a poem for your wife, but noone else, its rhymes are unimaginative and weak, and it doesnt have a lot of appeal -- sonnets are ahrd though so ill give you a 5 for effort -
on For China by Fear of Garbage
7 Mar 2005, 5:32 PM
intersting - i dont really get it though -
megan
megan
on Doesn't Take Much by Plaidypus
7 Mar 2005, 3:53 PM
absolutely excellent
- 10 -
-megan
- 10 -
-megan
replying on Death is a Three Step Process by dancin_n_da_moonlite
7 Mar 2005, 3:47 PM
i am afraid you have misunderstood
my acrostic includes all the words not just the first of each line
my acrostic includes all the words not just the first of each line
on one moment to the other by nentwined
5 Mar 2005, 11:44 AM
i like this alot
-9-
your word choice was very nice
-9-
your word choice was very nice
on The Escape by Geschäftsreise
5 Mar 2005, 11:41 AM
um why dont you write a story not a poem, because this comes across as very unskilled and choppy
but you might to nicely if you make it into a short story
but you might to nicely if you make it into a short story
on for sue (20030815) by nentwined
5 Mar 2005, 11:28 AM
i love this
it doesnt make much sense to me
but the sound of it makes it wonderful anyway
- 10 -
it doesnt make much sense to me
but the sound of it makes it wonderful anyway
- 10 -
the idea of it was brilliant
how long did it take you to compile this list
-megan