on When The Iron Curtain Came Down by RoseEyes
3 Oct 2002, 10:57 AM
Awww... baby raven...
on Hearts End by grrund
3 Oct 2002, 11:04 AM
All right, I can see that you needed a rhyme for 'road', but 'toad' really is pushing it a bit, don't you think?
on some deleted poem
4 Oct 2002, 9:00 PM
What do you know, you've again proved yourself a genius. But then what else is new?
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 12:27 PM
I like. I like a lot.
on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 5:25 PM
Yes... yes... she does rather deserve better than you. Rather.
Actually, I don't know the lady. Maybe she does deserve you. But if that's so, I can't imagine what she did in a past life. Poor thing.
Actually, I don't know the lady. Maybe she does deserve you. But if that's so, I can't imagine what she did in a past life. Poor thing.
on Sisters of mercy by strider1
9 Oct 2002, 11:23 AM
Ouch. Ouch. Ouch.
By the way, just because a line has ended does not mean it requires a comma.
By the way, just because a line has ended does not mean it requires a comma.
on one is leaving as i enter by Limness
8 Oct 2002, 12:12 PM
Because you're attracted to them. Admit it. You like it.
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 6:39 PM
Dare one ask for the percentage of poems you find that actually suit? I confess I've never read such a lovely poem about a website before.
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 12:17 PM
Lovely. For once I like images, message AND form. 'The phoenix does rise' irked me for a moment (it seems so cliched for you to use), but you save it with the next line.
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 12:20 PM
Not bad, not bad at all. Since you hate typos, I'll permit myself two notes: hesitations not nesitiations, and hers not her's.
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 12:26 PM
Not my favourite of yours. It's not that it's necessarily bad, it's just that for some reason I wouldn't put it in a personal book of favourites. As for the use of 'menstruating' (seeing as it seems to be the big issue -- or at least one of them), it does seem to be a tad out of place, but you get used to it. Not that it can't be used in a poem, I just didn't feel it quite fit this one. But what the devil, we'll assume you know what you're doing (when there's no shaggable male in the vicinity).
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 12:30 PM
'Wrecking ball' takes a half second to work. 'Takes no holidays' a bit longer, because it seems a bit out of place, but it works in the end. The 'I know your...' bits are excellent.
on Trying to say by persephone6358
8 Oct 2002, 12:36 PM
Dear gods. I cannot imagine why Hades would ever want to steal you away. I think I'll go warn him.
on It's time you get here by devina
8 Oct 2002, 12:45 PM
I think it's time you get out of your house and start looking. Yeeshus.
on why i look like a man by rosiebailey
8 Oct 2002, 1:01 PM
Either you're a genius like -=Dark_Angel=- or else you're an utter idiot. The jury's still out.
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2002, 1:03 PM
There you go. What's 'mujer', by the way? I understand the rest of the Spanish, but I don't actually speak the language and haven't a dictionary handy.
on Spanish fLie by flatliner
3 Oct 2002, 10:56 AM
Not sure I like it that, but the first stanza's quite good.
on The Dawn Of Darkness by Dariana
3 Oct 2002, 10:50 AM
I don't want to sound nasty, but I'm rooting for the stalker, myself.
on Funny Thought by phbiscuit
3 Oct 2002, 10:52 AM
This is 1)wonderful, 2)quite a realistic view of what goes through a dying person's mind. Bravo.
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2002, 11:02 AM
You are a descent girl. I'm not quite sure WHAT you're descended from, though.