on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2002, 10:35 AM
I love the first line, but the second lets it down.
on Suburbia in December by Nicholas Jones
3 Oct 2002, 10:41 AM
You could be something other than gloomy. Nights like that are beautiful.
Oh, wait, this is suburbia. All right, all you could be is gloomy. You're quite right.
Oh, wait, this is suburbia. All right, all you could be is gloomy. You're quite right.
on Confused by planetdicko
3 Oct 2002, 10:37 AM
Too many exclamations marks.
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2002, 10:39 AM
Mmm, tasty! can I have one too?
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2002, 8:38 PM
As usual, I love what you saying, and adore the images. I just can't bring myself to like the form. It annoys me, because I want to like it so much, but I just can't.
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2002, 8:40 PM
Not bad. Not bad at all, even.
on Anfal: Our 9/11 happened many times over by kawakurdi
25 Sep 2002, 9:21 PM
I have to agree that it drifts a little before the rolling off of the names, which is a stunning moment. What can I say, your long post talking about your village actually moved me more than most of the poem did. 'For, how many, which' was wonderful. And Poetandknowit, I must ask if you have read this poem in the original language, and if so if you understand that original language, before you go saying that's it's no good in that language.
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 10:00 PM
Hmmm... I feel ambiguous about this one. It's as if I want to like it but for some reason can't quite.
on glory bar realities by royalflesh
25 Sep 2002, 7:17 PM
The Jesus parts make it wonderful. Not so sure about the rest.
on The Sands Of Time by squall1leonheart
25 Sep 2002, 7:20 PM
I wouldn't mind the single line so much if you spelt well. Please tell me that 'houlisanating' wasn't just a typo, but supposed to mean something.
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 7:24 PM
Brilliant. I also agree. Kids today are far too coddled. Damn political correctness to the seventh circle of hell.
on Best Friends by Chels85
25 Sep 2002, 7:31 PM
Too many exclamation marks, among other things. Far too many. Especially since they're useless.
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 7:35 PM
'My "Hap"'? What the hell is a hap?
on All because of you by Artificial_Sweetner
25 Sep 2002, 9:54 PM
Why does your pain amuse us so much? Because it's so paltry, boring, cliched, misspelt and amusing. That's all,
Stacey dear, that's all.
Stacey dear, that's all.
on while you are away on the islands by poetandknowit
25 Sep 2002, 7:14 PM
'Your name scrawled three thousand times across my walls' is marvelous.
on You don't know me by toredikt
25 Sep 2002, 7:15 PM
I'm going to assume you meant 'the only reasonable thing'.