on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina
22 Oct 2005, 7:22 PM
But fuller, un-sucked-in stomachs make better drums!
on How often? by little_big_nose
22 Oct 2005, 7:20 PM
'And how often do we separate our masters from the leash' -- what?
on The Marble Me by PsydewaysTears
22 Oct 2005, 7:16 PM
The first two lines aren't bad. The rest...
on Leg by jessicazee
22 Oct 2005, 7:14 PM
Not that I necessarily disagree with the poem (especially since I've never seen your legs), but whether or not a hairy female leg is nice or not depends on the shape of the leg. As a rule, hairy ones will be just as nice when shaved, though the reverse is not necessarily true.
on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac
19 Oct 2005, 11:15 PM
Hmm. Not my style, but that doesn't mean I can't notice its quality -- a fact a lot of people forget.
replying on The nymph steals the farm-son by <~>
19 Oct 2005, 11:13 PM
Then again, what else would one expect of you, dear Tilde?
on The nymph steals the farm-son by <~>
19 Oct 2005, 11:12 PM
'Despite November in my heart/and December at my breast'-- nice. I admit I was going to simply congratulate ou on using November as opposed to another month, but the addition of December actually works.
on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
19 Oct 2005, 11:03 PM
There's something about 'the sun the other as/rooster crowing' that doesn't quite work. I couldn't pinpoint the proble, but it's there. A comma after 'sun' would simplify it, but perhaps too much.
on A Dark Account of History by D. $ Fontera
19 Oct 2005, 10:58 PM
ShamAn. Please. Hmm. Aside from that, 'tis all right.
on Air Guitar by Miggy
19 Oct 2005, 10:49 PM
Tee hee.
on Forgiveness by flightoffancy
19 Oct 2005, 10:45 PM
The first line is good. The rest... bwuh.
on River Valley Rose by TLRufener
19 Oct 2005, 10:43 PM
Hmm. I actually rather like this. The bit about hte grandfather seems almost irrelevant, it would be fine without (arguably). Not all of the punctuation is necessary.
on a skinny man on the dock by ay deee
19 Oct 2005, 10:26 PM
'Shaolin ninja on pole'... You've gone and impaled yourself, haven't you?
on Loving An Angel by Brego
19 Oct 2005, 10:20 PM
I was going to rant about the angel, except you kept it as a leitmotiv. That's something.
replying on never visit a diner twice by Bill Z Bub
16 Oct 2005, 10:37 PM
Agreed.
on Was Everyone Put On This Earth For A Reason by cabot
16 Oct 2005, 10:32 PM
We were put on this earth to fertilise it with our bodies once we are dead.
on Sleep It All Away by somemorepoetry
16 Oct 2005, 10:31 PM
Whien whine whine sentimentality.