on nicholson by ay deee
19 Sep 2005, 1:08 PM
right on
replying on The Death of an Octopus by tianyi
16 Sep 2005, 7:32 PM
The Villanelle's done if you're interested.
on loud clubbin by ay deee
16 Sep 2005, 10:33 AM
The relationship between thick cut rug and invisible trousers is intriguing. Do you wear the rug like a large conical skirt?
I enjoyed this.
I enjoyed this.
replying on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi
16 Sep 2005, 10:07 AM
Hahaha, that's great. Hehe. You just spoiled my own poem for me! The thing is, I probably say 'oh' a lot in real life too. And I'm a guy. You've got me questioning my sexuality.
on Unbroken Horses by Caducus
16 Sep 2005, 9:57 AM
I liked
when she died face down
on fresh linen.
'Beauty' was shot in the hind leg
tried to stand three times but fell.
But all in all not enough insight or images that will stick in my mind. It reads like hopelessly melancholic list of how crap things are. "Grandma's dead, I'm a bastard, Grandpa shot my horse, Grandpa's dead"
Perhaps just focus on one of these.
when she died face down
on fresh linen.
'Beauty' was shot in the hind leg
tried to stand three times but fell.
But all in all not enough insight or images that will stick in my mind. It reads like hopelessly melancholic list of how crap things are. "Grandma's dead, I'm a bastard, Grandpa shot my horse, Grandpa's dead"
Perhaps just focus on one of these.
replying on The Death of an Octopus by tianyi
16 Sep 2005, 9:40 AM
Thanks, im working on a Villanelle in a similar vein.
replying on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi
16 Sep 2005, 4:18 AM
Cannery Row? *Googles*
"Novel by John Steinbeck, published in 1945. Like most of Steinbeck's postwar work, Cannery Row is sentimental in tone while retaining the author's characteristic social criticism. Peopled by stereotypical good-natured bums and warm-hearted prostitutes living on the fringes of Monterey, Calif., the picaresque novel celebrates lowlifes who are poor but happy."
I've never heard of it, but I'll take the extra points!
"Novel by John Steinbeck, published in 1945. Like most of Steinbeck's postwar work, Cannery Row is sentimental in tone while retaining the author's characteristic social criticism. Peopled by stereotypical good-natured bums and warm-hearted prostitutes living on the fringes of Monterey, Calif., the picaresque novel celebrates lowlifes who are poor but happy."
I've never heard of it, but I'll take the extra points!
replying on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi
15 Sep 2005, 4:51 PM
Wow, thankyou very much!
on Emotionally Unavailable by horus8
15 Sep 2005, 4:47 PM
yes
replying on Tall Windows by tianyi
13 Sep 2005, 2:48 AM
I just added the comma without thinking to hard about it.