replying on Selfish by darby pyn
29 Oct 2002, 12:45 PM
thank you tintagiles. I'll try to fix it.
on In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~>
28 Oct 2002, 11:27 PM
or "Glass reactions"
on In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~>
28 Oct 2002, 11:25 PM
You just wrote a great melodic
punk song. I got the guitar down
perfect for this.
you should call it "love and war"
punk song. I got the guitar down
perfect for this.
you should call it "love and war"
on From a letter (never sent) by UnityMitford
23 Oct 2002, 12:00 PM
very nice. 8
replying on www.people.freenet.de/freeek/SajjadAli.swf by darby pyn
22 Oct 2002, 8:20 PM
Thank you horus. I had this ideal of an " interactive poem".
something to exploit our medium. plus Halloween is near.
something to exploit our medium. plus Halloween is near.
replying on The generosity of others. by darby pyn
20 Oct 2002, 10:40 AM
Thank you Nicholas.
replying on The generosity of others. by darby pyn
19 Oct 2002, 7:15 PM
very true. my rant explanation sounds like nervous laughter
Im sure my ADD comment pertains to that. their is
is no excuse. I just need more practice.
Im sure my ADD comment pertains to that. their is
is no excuse. I just need more practice.
replying on The generosity of others. by darby pyn
19 Oct 2002, 4:31 PM
not long maybe an hour. mostly check for spelling errors.
though you couldn't tell lately. it's like my guitar
playing there is no structure it's not style it's
more a spontaneous cumbustion and I would rather explode
than be a conductor and suppress the moment. I have
never been diagnosed but I must have add.
though you couldn't tell lately. it's like my guitar
playing there is no structure it's not style it's
more a spontaneous cumbustion and I would rather explode
than be a conductor and suppress the moment. I have
never been diagnosed but I must have add.
replying on The generosity of others. by darby pyn
19 Oct 2002, 3:04 PM
much better. I realy do need an editor:). thank you again.
replying on The generosity of others. by darby pyn
19 Oct 2002, 1:15 PM
I will try. I dont tend to write poems with positive
themes well. I like to expose a situation I dislike and
in that make the point about it's validity. I know it's a
round the bout way but that's just the way I write.
this poem is about my private school years " Baptist temple
christian academy" and all the hypocrisy I saw. but
I will give it a shot.
themes well. I like to expose a situation I dislike and
in that make the point about it's validity. I know it's a
round the bout way but that's just the way I write.
this poem is about my private school years " Baptist temple
christian academy" and all the hypocrisy I saw. but
I will give it a shot.
replying on casting couch by darby pyn
18 Oct 2002, 2:54 PM
I hope so. shit I spelled couch wrong.oops
replying on casting couch by darby pyn
18 Oct 2002, 12:34 PM
it's more in the lines of the finality of the poem/song
is such a defeat. you want her to wake up. it's about
denial and accepting it. if somone hates the conclusion
of the song so much they say I will never be that person
then the ends justify the means.
is such a defeat. you want her to wake up. it's about
denial and accepting it. if somone hates the conclusion
of the song so much they say I will never be that person
then the ends justify the means.
replying on casting couch by darby pyn
17 Oct 2002, 9:16 PM
it anoys so many people the way I write. either rhyme or
dont. but this one in paticular is a punk song played
very fast. so I don't catch these rule of writing
imperfections at conception.
sorry. I do appreciate your comments.
dont. but this one in paticular is a punk song played
very fast. so I don't catch these rule of writing
imperfections at conception.
sorry. I do appreciate your comments.
on Musings from the LTD by w~* ATHENA *~w
19 Sep 2002, 1:00 AM
I let loose a night's worth of drinking on the neck and hair of
an unsuspecting girl at a Green Day
show and slowly left before she
noticed. your poem brings all that
back. thank you. should loose read the news and end on "paid my dues".
still nice. 8
an unsuspecting girl at a Green Day
show and slowly left before she
noticed. your poem brings all that
back. thank you. should loose read the news and end on "paid my dues".
still nice. 8
replying on Not in front of the kids. by darby pyn
19 Sep 2002, 12:41 AM
" Whisper to a scream". I forgot about that damn song.
replying on untitled#3 by darby pyn
19 Sep 2002, 12:33 AM
I like pee. :)
replying on Not in front of the kids. by darby pyn
12 Sep 2002, 3:06 PM
good point. I forgot about that song. I should have called it
" Not in front of the kids". as in pool I shoot too quick
before thinking.
" Not in front of the kids". as in pool I shoot too quick
before thinking.
replying on untitled#3 by darby pyn
10 Sep 2002, 1:53 AM
It's simple. a story comes to me, I put it on
paper, if I like it I expose it. being clever is not an option
my vocabulary is basic and the process is too fast.
but I understand this is a site full of criticism and praise
and both are needed to grow.
paper, if I like it I expose it. being clever is not an option
my vocabulary is basic and the process is too fast.
but I understand this is a site full of criticism and praise
and both are needed to grow.