on On The Bench Outside Gruhn's Guitars by <~>
1 Feb 2003, 11:26 PM
haha cute
on Waiting for things to Happen by nentwined
20 May 2002, 3:44 PM
I really enjoyed this whimsical poem. thanks for posting it
on missing time by Bill Z Bub
21 Dec 2002, 11:19 PM
Wow, I really like this. I know the point of the "wake up" bit and that following it was to suddenly change the mood but it's too harsh a change to me. I think this poem should be ended at "you're late." *shrugs* just me...
on some deleted poem
14 Nov 2002, 11:54 AM
I especially liked the third stanza... the body knowing how to dance. Interesting it's the body doing the 'knowing'. I liked this
on some deleted poem
10 Sep 2002, 12:51 PM
having been to City Lights and North Beach.... you didn't miss much ;-)
on Navel Action by BadPoet
7 Jul 2002, 9:24 PM
Hmmm I'm disgusted and somehow charmed at the same time
on some deleted poem
23 May 2002, 5:26 PM
Wow, i reallllly enjoyed this. I can't put my finger on just why, other than perhaps having climbed up Mount Tam and having a raincloud burst when i hit the top finally lol
on incidentally, all royalties to the estate of WCW by lilli
23 May 2002, 6:09 PM
cute... I think WCW would have approved
on Why Me? by Tarquin De La Bog
1 Feb 2003, 11:17 PM
I actually liked the story told from the speaker/rapist's view, but as I've noticed you do in other poems, you sacrificed rhythm for rhyme and that puts unnatural stops in the poem.