on The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom
18 Mar 2006, 8:36 PM
I would have given this a 4, but after reading 9/11, I would give it an 11. Exquisite literature.
The only problem I have with it is it is an incomplete sentence, "bringing" being in the present tense form. You might try:
Gentle ocean waves,
Always moving with the wind
Breathe a life to all
But I'm not trying to write it for you. In fact, I don't really like what I wrote either X(
Gentle ocean waves,
Always moving with the wind
Breathe a life to all
But I'm not trying to write it for you. In fact, I don't really like what I wrote either X(
on Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos
18 Mar 2006, 7:43 PM
I like it
on Depression by terbenaw
26 Feb 2006, 1:08 AM
very well done 9/10