on Sit tight, sweetheart by JMakStak
6 Jun 2007, 2:42 AM
people blinded by the pr and politics fronting a war? losing loved ones in choosing ignorance?
I'm interested to know what this is about, because I like the poem itself, language etcetera. but I like the metaphore/simile/etc itself a whole lot more.
I'm interested to know what this is about, because I like the poem itself, language etcetera. but I like the metaphore/simile/etc itself a whole lot more.
on Interest and Association by MacFrantic
6 Jun 2007, 2:39 AM
S'almost a swinging twenties style applied to an eighties era. I like how you desribe things - the adjectives and metaphores - and the twisted structure behind the words.
It's the kind of poem you expect to be read by a slick voice through thick lips. Slant rhyme, and all that jazz.
=> Jess
It's the kind of poem you expect to be read by a slick voice through thick lips. Slant rhyme, and all that jazz.
=> Jess
I have to say I hadn't read the title. Hence to define my understand of bitter beyond the blatantly obvious, you knew she'd regret letting go of you, as you protected her from what may have happened in her past from reoccuring/bringing her back down again.
Thus great use of metaphore in the ghosts...
=> Jess
Thus great use of metaphore in the ghosts...
=> Jess
replying on [Gasp]{last letter, first letter} by sca
6 Jun 2007, 2:00 AM
To be honest, I've read very little, and have very little understanding, of any poetry I haven't just happened across on the internet.
I like writing literature in all forms, how-ever read mainly books.
But back on track, I have liked Byron whence I've read his works.
I like writing literature in all forms, how-ever read mainly books.
But back on track, I have liked Byron whence I've read his works.
on save a class now by FreeFormFixation
6 Jun 2007, 1:51 AM
I might have to favouritise you so I know where to go when I can come back (whence I'm not cramming for exams).
I like it. It's cheeky. On a more formal note I think it detereorated from "And roger was weeping," but I wouldn't change anything if it'll mean taking away from the general feel.
Haha, awesome.
=> Jess
I like it. It's cheeky. On a more formal note I think it detereorated from "And roger was weeping," but I wouldn't change anything if it'll mean taking away from the general feel.
Haha, awesome.
=> Jess
on behind the banister by FreeFormFixation
6 Jun 2007, 1:48 AM
Is calico a cat or a dog?
Albeit you've got hopeed instead of hopped, at least, but I like your style. I guess I like a bit of skittish madness in the form of freeform, lol.
Come to think of it, I've never been a fan of form (because I can't master it myself ;))
=> Jess
Albeit you've got hopeed instead of hopped, at least, but I like your style. I guess I like a bit of skittish madness in the form of freeform, lol.
Come to think of it, I've never been a fan of form (because I can't master it myself ;))
=> Jess
replying on Like a Whore {erotic} by sca
4 Jun 2007, 5:23 AM
merci, it was actually the first non-romanticised piece of erotica I wrote, and to date I haven't been able to meet it.
on Let's Grovel For Jesus And Fight The Naughty Satan! by Sing4Jesus!
3 Jun 2007, 5:15 AM
Although I can see why you'd get rated lowly, I also don't see how it's that bad as a poem. The religious nuts have to pull their heads out of their arses and realise you're supposed to rate a poem on it's merits, not your own personal beliefs.
=> Jess
=> Jess
I like how you desribe things, in themselves, but I don't like the repetition. Kitch language (which I like), but then again the repetition of words like and and for and how kind of drown it out.
But I mean, we're talking personal tastes here. You know how it's best read, not me lol.