on I Speak of Expanses by anitawit
25 Apr 2003, 6:44 AM
Lines 2 and 7 seem a wee off beat. but it's quite enjoyable.
on The Days Are Dying by anitawit
22 Apr 2003, 6:35 AM
bingo.
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
22 Apr 2003, 4:12 PM
If this ever dissappears, I'll die.
on Noone really knows by CHRMEcountryGRL
21 Apr 2003, 9:23 PM
You need some concrete. To grind off that chrome.
on Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger
24 Apr 2003, 5:14 PM
Nice to know you've got a coach. The woodsman part seemed humorous, to me. And the knigdom manager made it seem like you gave up. Just my view. I'm rather blind at the moment.
on Landscapes In The Sky by anitawit
25 Apr 2003, 6:49 AM
I think myriad(s). I think when you wrote this, you sat down and wrote without thinking, just wrote. and it works. 8 I think the other is better because you put work into it. both are swell.
on some deleted poem
24 Apr 2003, 5:57 AM
I must be missing something. S-3 and the last sum it up for me. It's good. It's you. I just think you are capable of more.;)
on some deleted poem
24 Apr 2003, 6:00 AM
drop the (s) from insomniac. Seems pretty beefy otherwise.
on some deleted poem
24 Apr 2003, 6:06 AM
Drats! I love the beat. The seeming repetetive nature of the words kills me. Trim and blend, I would recommend.
on Jenny Jones, Jenny Jones by bondjedi
24 Apr 2003, 6:10 AM
Do all of these shows. together.
on some deleted poem
22 Apr 2003, 7:03 PM
The easterly wind carries much weight. When it gets where it is going it may carry hate. Tread lightly on foreign land.
Say, I tweaked (my wife) care to peek?
She likes it when I tweak her.
Say, I tweaked (my wife) care to peek?
She likes it when I tweak her.
on some deleted poem
22 Apr 2003, 6:28 AM
Whats babycham? Chambord? The changes are subtle but better. Still a fun story.
on When the Future Comes to Pass by e1ementfire
22 Apr 2003, 6:44 AM
replEnished. A religious Eminem? Liked it anyway.
on suck fucker punch by wordho
23 Apr 2003, 5:49 AM
the short uncapped sentences really bring out the anger/frustration. interesting tool you have there. or lack thereof.
on some deleted poem
21 Apr 2003, 6:43 PM
nutty, but on point
on some deleted poem
21 Apr 2003, 6:45 PM
no. make a haiku for the utensil drawer.
on some deleted poem
24 Apr 2003, 5:45 PM
Ignore me. I'm polluted and need to clear my head.
on isms and ities by Amelia
23 Apr 2003, 2:10 PM
Don't ever stop reaching.....