on Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky
29 Sep 2002, 4:17 PM
Poingnant,scary,funny.8
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
1 Oct 2002, 5:57 AM
That is beautiful. A tear has fallen. Scale not big enough.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 5:49 PM
Sweeet. Thats perfect as far as I'm concerned.
on At The Sloane Slattery on Saturday by Limness
30 Sep 2002, 6:41 PM
WOO HOO!!! Another motorhead! I prefer mine with four wheels but since I've moved from the Mile High to WI, I can really dig that cool Harley vibe. Ride on!!!!
on Asthma by jessicazee
30 Sep 2002, 6:52 PM
This has potential. Focus more on the breathing aspects and less on other junk. No score. work it.
on Suicide III by disturbedone182
29 Sep 2002, 8:37 AM
I've seen a suicide. Guy shot himself with a .22 handgun. It's nothing more than sad and selfish. We owe you no apology either. BUT there's a rythm.2
on Paysage Moralise by vulcan
29 Sep 2002, 8:43 AM
I really like this.9 Iwish I understood (latin) the title.
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2002, 8:48 AM
I'm not the best at rcognizing patterns but I think this needa just a little tweaking. Try shifing some lines around.7
on Paysage Moralise by vulcan
29 Sep 2002, 4:09 PM
Sorry I assumed latin. What a dumb-fuck eh?
on The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo
28 Sep 2002, 3:43 PM
Of the three, this is the better I think. I think you can improve with future pieces. Welcome.9
on some deleted poem
28 Sep 2002, 3:46 PM
This seems like practice in rythm or patterns, little else. Did you let the hammer fall or what,D.A?
on some deleted poem
28 Sep 2002, 3:48 PM
Buy a heated blanket and forget about 'im!!! Nice work ma'am.9
on I'll Always Remember by NobodyGirl9
28 Sep 2002, 3:53 PM
Shorten and add a little beef.Good rythm.8
on A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle
28 Sep 2002, 3:56 PM
AAW CHRIST! THATS FUNNY. I remember I was at a 7-11 in Colo and this lady was putting her daughter in the car when the little on held up a pack of Dolly Madisons and yelled DONUTS!
on some deleted poem
28 Sep 2002, 7:55 PM
No, but this is the lowest i've scored any one since I've been here.
on always the end to this good night by nentwined
30 Sep 2002, 6:55 PM
Seriously, what's up with the sleep dep. dude. Dudette?
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 7:06 PM
Of the four , this falls pretty flat. The other three are decent and I think you have talent. This is a tough crowd. Show us.
Or a haiku master for that matter.But, it's fun, take a friggin' nap will ya! And thanks for leaving my dumb ass on the site.You knew I'd be back didntcha?