on Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8
21 Oct 2002, 7:34 AM
Jagged, endless possibilities, and WIERD to say the least. You are strange. "Everyones strange, when you're a stranger"...7 because I pulled little from it. Probably me.
replying on One liners for the ladies by INTRANSIT
21 Oct 2002, 7:25 AM
Ok Dark Angel, I'm listening.
on nothing could by nentwined
21 Oct 2002, 6:06 AM
Good! I was worried about you, scared you had'nt seen the light of day for months! HA! you're alive! It is a deep cyberworld indeed. Please do not let it suck the marrow from your being and leave you a hallowed keyboard stroker. 8 for your dead end:)
replying on One liners for the ladies by INTRANSIT
21 Oct 2002, 5:58 AM
Thanks Cristof, I have 30 of these darn things right now and have no clue what to do with them. Not to mention I can crank these out all day long. It wasn't meant to be a poem, just oneliners. If you've got an idea, I'm all eyes.
replying on One liners for the ladies by INTRANSIT
20 Oct 2002, 7:43 PM
I guess people some times forget that love can be found anywhere, not just in the bedroom. Thanks.
on this tuesday morning by teacup
20 Oct 2002, 3:04 PM
I like all three, but I'm a little confused about"fruit punch". How long does it take the sun to set in Oregon on I-5 in the summer?6
on Premarital Sex (Zombie Fantasy) by Sigh'ense...
20 Oct 2002, 2:58 PM
Not that I know a whole lot about poetry, my reccomendations are:
Delete "penetration" and "ejaculation" I think less is more with this work. I also think you can say the same thing and get the same result with half the material. Just my opinion. 6
Delete "penetration" and "ejaculation" I think less is more with this work. I also think you can say the same thing and get the same result with half the material. Just my opinion. 6
on Fact About the Wind by Ninoy_Instigator
19 Oct 2002, 9:54 AM
I like the way it souds like a breif time you two weree together, but how enjoyable the time was.
on On the Swings by Christof
18 Oct 2002, 4:36 PM
No curmudgeon could have written" Instructions to a sculpter". The only reason you have ex-girlfiends is because their glasses were dirty. Very diry indeed! Happy 29th approaching!
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
18 Oct 2002, 5:50 AM
Thanks for your help, is there any thing I could've done better?
Also the "bears" is a stab at the stock market. I do see the bears as other bill collectors though. Gotta haul some cars for a while( ironically enough). Chat in a few days:)
Also the "bears" is a stab at the stock market. I do see the bears as other bill collectors though. Gotta haul some cars for a while( ironically enough). Chat in a few days:)
replying on On the Swings by Christof
17 Oct 2002, 4:16 PM
Thanks for your help Christof, I really appreciate this. V2 is up and a hearty cup of Earl Grey to you:)
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 4:12 PM
Thanks ls29, it did need a facelift though. I hope it didn't lose anything. How're things going for you?
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 4:10 PM
Thanks for your comment zzinnia66. Iwent thataway and it seems to make more sense now. I promise never to ignore you again:)
Capice?
Capice?
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 4:08 PM
Well, she's no Walt Whitman, I think she's got some good stuff in her book though.
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 8:03 AM
Will do. I think I have a small flare for grandness and thats why my coffee thing worked. Shakespeare would fit. I'll try some of your reccomendations. I have a couple of mixed poetry books that give me a sample of many. As childish as it may seem, I would recommend: A night without armor by Jewel.
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 7:31 AM
Maybe 'twould be better if I went the capitalistic route? What/whose writing would you recommend I read? Thanks for the flowers.
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 7:18 AM
Holy shit C! Thanks for that completely alternate view. I was going to do capitalism at some point but it seems I glanced it here, I shall take your advice and apply my hammer to the steel. Thanks.