on On the Swings by Christof
17 Oct 2002, 5:41 AM
Swing away! If I shut up long enough, would you mentor me?
on Anti-Kinetic by anonymous
17 Oct 2002, 5:37 AM
Ok, I can't see any problems with this as is. I think you may be poetandknowit toying with me though. Either way I like this piece.9 if you're interested in the scoring
on Anti-Kinetic by anonymous
16 Oct 2002, 8:07 PM
Maybe I'm just warmin' up.
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
16 Oct 2002, 7:41 PM
Why thank you m'dear. I thought of drums but I figgered that to be to obvious, any other suggestions?
on Reptiles & Dust - Twenty-two through Forty-two by Wulf
16 Oct 2002, 6:51 PM
Some thing works here. But it is a very large circle you're drawing with it.
on How I Got Laid by liljsmith87
16 Oct 2002, 6:47 PM
No, ya got it wrong. This IS a place where you kiss and tell.
on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness
16 Oct 2002, 6:44 PM
I dunno, this speaks to me of a prostitutes sadness towards her predicament...? Well written, I think.
on ~*Broken Soul*~ by Katie
16 Oct 2002, 4:01 PM
Yup, works best when you do it that way.
on Warmth Amidst Winter by loneshadow29
14 Oct 2002, 5:36 PM
I like the transition from sadness to happiness.Um, your still telling,not showing. Instead of using a season directly(winter), try being more specific. I.E. Compare your feeling of sorrow to a frozen lake. Compare your happiness to the smoldering coals of a fire not yet fully extinguished. You want your feeling to be worse (or better) than anyone elses, so exaggerate the feeling, this helps grab your audience. Did you knock a knuckle on the counter? Then make it sound as if you slammed your hand in a friggin CAR DOOR! See the diff? Keep going, you're gaining on it.6 I'm gonna make you work for it.
on Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
14 Oct 2002, 4:44 PM
I have to agree, enjoyably gross! Absolute artsy fartsy shit! Hard to think I could learn from this,but.....
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2002, 4:33 PM
Happy birthing!,then.
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2002, 4:29 PM
You seem to enjoy ripping others poetry to get them to rip you back. Trying to draw people out n stuff. You like playfull and slightly mean verbal jousting. Am I wrong? If so, please define your humor for me so I don't go round assuming the wrong things.
replying on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT
14 Oct 2002, 4:17 PM
My dittos exactly.
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2002, 9:30 AM
You're a riot Z. And I'm starting to see Dark Angels humor too. Thanks for the vote of confidence;)
on Few Words by Tom Colebrooke
14 Oct 2002, 9:25 AM
All three are quite enjoyable. You like bees, and honey. Sounds like you like women. You have humor, very important. Thanks for the laugh,welcome,enjoy!888
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2002, 9:12 AM
Sorry P&K, are you referring to this piece being a baby or me? I'd hoped my level was above "baby", but then my emotions some times suggest otherwise. "One country" seems far from being a baby. OY! I talk too much.
replying on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT
14 Oct 2002, 9:04 AM
I believe GANDHI was to a degree, a poet. He led an army of people to fight without physical violence. I was going for "fun' not goofy. Could you recommend some reading that may help me improve my skills?
Dealership, real estate and circus. I need to pick one. I'm trying to make it reflect my feeling toward our war with Iraq. Hussein,Bin laden , and bush. How did you know I like Mercs? Those lead sleds do it for me every time. Thanks, I should work this shouldn't I?