Comments byINTRANSIT, 1961–1980 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on untitled by ThreeFourSix 23 Sep 2002, 2:54 PM
I hate it when they don't listen! 7 his could use more and not hurt it.
on Universal Musings by blu143 23 Sep 2002, 2:51 PM
Trim this by the first fifty-percent and let it fly.7
on Friends by Ashley 23 Sep 2002, 2:48 PM
I think you worked at this. Good feeling however you missed the flow.(Paddled too hard).7
on Me and She. by peach835 23 Sep 2002, 5:52 AM
Circ-ular! Love it! Fun! Poignant too.8
on Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan 23 Sep 2002, 5:49 AM
Sooooooo much with sooooo little.
This is artful!!!!!! 9
on Pilgrim by timfowler 23 Sep 2002, 5:47 AM
A quietly powerful piece. Quite good acually. I'll leave it to others more Knowledgeable than I to "harsh your gig".8
on suffer the child by edge 23 Sep 2002, 5:43 AM
Oh how I hate pain and suffering. However as a lyric this does fly pretty easily. Can't think......8
on .:|bittersweet|:. by emman 23 Sep 2002, 5:38 AM
This has a subtle power,and 3 idea possibilities.Alittle ironing, simplification and BOOM! it's there. 8
on When The Iron Curtain Came Down by RoseEyes 23 Sep 2002, 5:33 AM
The"walls" went up late, then came down quickly.First group seems a little off. Easy to read,liked it.7
on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore 23 Sep 2002, 5:24 AM
Good stuff! Tree sap color? A girls broken heart? I like poems that lend themselves to 2 way thoughts. 8
on Faded by aperfecttool77 23 Sep 2002, 5:17 AM
Awareness is important, action is more. Good product. Go deeper!
on Ex In Bonds by OneFingerAnswer 22 Sep 2002, 7:04 PM
Nice rhyme! Almost fooled me with the title, or did you? Next time, turn it up!
on The End OF Me by Birdman42s 22 Sep 2002, 7:00 PM
If at first you don't succeed...
Iron it out, otherwise it works.
on Lysander cried by bornagainpoet 22 Sep 2002, 6:57 PM
I like simplicity, could be modified to rhyme without losing it's intent. Good stuff!
on I Think by PawnedTidal 22 Sep 2002, 6:47 PM
Nice. Clean. Too surfacy though, you dipped well with the angel/amiss. Go deeper.
on america's promise by dylansong 22 Sep 2002, 6:38 PM
When I find a solution I'll let you know. I tire of tragedy though.
Ironically, I cant help you.
on the silent storm by mallory180 22 Sep 2002, 6:32 PM
Distributors go round, 'till they get stuck. Don't ask 'cause I don't know. Less is more here I think. I felt it though. (Hoping to find???????)
on The Class of 2012 by jess33 22 Sep 2002, 6:27 PM
Simple, truthful. Rework for a little fluidity maybe? Agreeable!
on Martyr by kawakurdi 22 Sep 2002, 6:24 PM
Painful,cyclical. Difficult (for me). Pain, deep pain.
on For James Thomson(1834-1882):an Epitaph by vulcan 22 Sep 2002, 6:15 PM
Go on wit yo bad self!! I don't know this writer but now I want to.