on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2003, 9:44 PM
Not finished yet, but I figured I'd get your feel for it so far, new style and all. Pleeze be gentle, I,m soooo sensitive.
on On the Occasion by tadpole
2 Oct 2003, 8:48 PM
You must be Native American.What Occasion may I ask?
on Neophyte Bourgeoisie by EAger to Offend
24 Sep 2003, 11:21 PM
Yea, sometimes life is sweet, sometimes it's the extra's.(The deck, afternoon brunches, Lady McBeth?)
Sometimes it's time alone.
Sometimes it's time alone.
on Little Girl by Pervy Elf
24 Sep 2003, 10:34 PM
I don't know what to think for sure. Why all the Cap's?
I see where youre going but I don't follow.
I see where youre going but I don't follow.
on An End to the Beginning by Pervy Elf
24 Sep 2003, 10:47 PM
You are still so young. Don't stress it. If it's not right, don't worry about it. Move on and don't look back.Life's too short to deal with assholes. Are you cute by the way? I'm a poet you know. Read some of mine. Tell me what you think. just click my name.
on Little Girl by Pervy Elf
24 Sep 2003, 10:55 PM
Capitol H Him. Do you mean God? I'm sure not, so why capitolize "him" ?The beginning of each line in a poem should be cap'd.
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2003, 10:36 PM
Um,hello.
Of or relating to a category of poetry that expresses subjective thoughts and feelings, often in a songlike style or form.
Not lyric?
Of or relating to a category of poetry that expresses subjective thoughts and feelings, often in a songlike style or form.
Not lyric?
on Insight by Moniquesuvee
27 Sep 2003, 8:03 AM
It sounds good though, I especially like it for the mechanic stuff. With a name like yours you don't seem like you'd be a mechanic. Good poet though.
on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2003, 9:50 PM
well man I don't know what to think of your well thought out sarcastic interlude. If you truly are in a wheelchair(catheter and all) I should think you'd have spent your time better than this. Buuutt, you make me laugh. HA HA
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 9:16 PM
I think you may be exactly what these pimple faced baboons need. Oh to breath the fresh scented air of a new style. (Plus I saw your picture, and DAMN.)Read a few more of mine and speak freely, please. Well done with this.
on Why do you give yourself blue tens? by Bachus
2 Oct 2003, 8:46 PM
As are you with this. You know, someone likes giving bunches of those anonymous 0's also. Write one for those cowards.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 8:51 PM
Hmm, possibly your best so far? no, but close.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 8:56 PM
It is a song. Take the verse about Grand-pa and build on it, I'd be interested in hearing that. Not that thas isn"t interesting, but I especially like that image. Talk about how it's bringing grandma down, etc.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 8:59 PM
Verse 4, line 2, heeded? Leave my with a smile baby, I'll still love you in the morning.Especially after the poems you would be bound to write about the smile I put on you.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 9:03 PM
Why do all of these have 3 ten's? Are you cheating? Hoar us wrote a haiku about that. Anyway on to the poem. What to say? Quit dating insensitive assholes who can't finish for starters. Still, a well written emotional vent.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 9:09 PM
A nice piece to get lost in. And I do get lost, simple minded as I am. If you read any more of mine you'll see what I mean, just click my name. But back to this one,I think you must study Ancient Greece and the Bible, I see them both here somehow. I like it
I shall bestow a meritorious 10.
I shall bestow a meritorious 10.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 9:22 PM
It's funny that you would use "Sliver of reality",Then talk about my purpose in life. Few and far between are we, but I am certain that will change, just like the weather, may a new season come.