poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Blue Magpie (121-140)

Comments byBlue Magpie, 121–140 back. Include replies

on Whispering (Zero Atmosphere) by Y2kSlamPoet 9 Oct 2003, 12:22 AM
Very interesting piece, nicely composed and expressed.
on The Search by OneFingerAnswer 13 Jul 2003, 12:28 AM
I think it should be

Plugging one gap only to seal(find) another

as it is it doesn't make much sense. On the whole it is a bit repetitive in the second half
on A Brand New Eye by EAger to Offend 13 Jul 2003, 12:29 AM
Interesting.
on Afraid to love you by lil cindy lu who 29 May 2003, 8:09 PM
Very nice
on some deleted poem 13 Jul 2003, 9:52 PM
Nice imagery, but it does look as if the curator and the chair blend into one another a bit. Also should the chair have two arms.
on some deleted poem 13 Jul 2003, 10:03 PM
Remember, the more common the theme, the rarer, or more beautiful your expression of it needs to be, otherwise it becomes ...just another...
on New Forms by Rodavlas 13 Jul 2003, 10:07 PM
Spelling = views, question boundful, do you mean bountiful

A little repetitive on the New Forms bit.
on some deleted poem 29 May 2003, 8:15 PM
Not bad, the line
shooting you’s amusing.
seems out of sync with your rhyme scheme though
on some deleted poem 9 Oct 2003, 12:20 AM
Very Nice, spelling = Crystalise

The last two stanzas are the weakest, I think the punctuation in them could do with a little work, but otherwise excellent.
on The Ballad of Robert Kilroy-Silk by Steaming Dung Heap 12 Jan 2004, 9:12 AM
I guess he must be English.
on Snowflake by fevriere 12 Jan 2004, 9:15 AM
I lost it in a few places but you are talking about living in a foreign land so I guess that expected
on Up. by fevriere 12 Jan 2004, 9:17 AM
This looks a bit rough to me, like a diamond still partly encased in the rock that was its womb, it needs a little work. But the light is there.
on lemuridae by richa 12 Jan 2004, 9:20 AM
forest's wet or forest-wet. I didn't uderstand the ending at all so I will withold my vote.
on some deleted poem 17 Feb 2004, 11:00 PM
The metre is a bit ropey in places, S1L2, S3L2 S3L4, S4L3 and L4, and most S5 which is the worst in my view, but still it is nicely written.
on An Angel by broken_wing11 17 Feb 2004, 11:03 PM
A little repetitive in the message.
on Meditations on a Human Skeleton in a Museum by Sasha 5 Sep 2004, 9:19 AM
5 for the thought.
on some deleted poem 5 Sep 2004, 9:25 AM
Given your use of repitition here you might want to consider rewriting this as a Villanelle, or other repeating format.
on Broken Sonnet by Sasha 5 Sep 2004, 9:26 AM
A broken 8
on The American Soldier by x0lovelylarnx0 5 Sep 2004, 9:33 AM
Nice to see such intelligent constructive interaction, considering I haven't seen one correctly written sonnet yet I sense a certain imagery of pots and kettles here.

Not that the poem is any good, but the criticism is for the most part worse.
on Dawn Jig by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 5 Sep 2004, 9:35 AM
Could you explain how this gets to be called a sonnet???????????