on Timing by INTRANSIT
26 May 2003, 10:40 PM
I liked Definity, though I have never heard it before, but I lost it on the high point in my eyes, probab;ly a result of the low point in my mind, it has a nice feel though.
on Activating your Infinity by horus8
25 May 2003, 3:57 AM
Quite an interesting story, reading the comments is almost as much fun.
on some deleted poem
28 May 2003, 8:44 PM
Sounds like a song lyric to me, what with the repititions and all. I was intrigued by the title and thought it might be a little more critical of religion, oh it was nice anyway.
on Plastic Posies by BleedingRose
28 May 2003, 8:51 PM
As a poem there are a few hiccups in the metre but it was delightful never-the-less.
on I Am(Defined) by lil cindy lu who
27 May 2003, 8:34 PM
I wouldn't go throughing things in the trash bin, the idea of defining yourself in a poem is OK, just work on it, some poems take a lot of reshaping you just have to keep at them.
on A Summers Day In Stolen Eden by Mr Pig
27 May 2003, 8:37 PM
The LSD trip at the beginning was interesting but the second part of the poem was much more poetic.
on The other side of a rainbow by thepinkbunnyofdoom
27 May 2003, 8:39 PM
Not bad imagery here. I like it.
on some deleted poem
12 Mar 2003, 9:14 PM
Hi,
I would have drown myself in your skin
I think this line could be better.
I would have drown myself in your skin
I think this line could be better.
on some deleted poem
22 Feb 2003, 10:46 PM
Hi,
Sad poem's often seem stronger than happy ones, is that we feel the negatives so much more or simply that we take the good times for granted.
Vindictive or Vendetta but not Vendictive to my knowledge, though i am always willing to learn. Both the above are from the same italian root however, and someone has to make up the new words.
Sad poem's often seem stronger than happy ones, is that we feel the negatives so much more or simply that we take the good times for granted.
Vindictive or Vendetta but not Vendictive to my knowledge, though i am always willing to learn. Both the above are from the same italian root however, and someone has to make up the new words.
on Mastermind by wOrnella Mutiw
15 Feb 2003, 10:19 PM
Hi,
1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma....
nice though. I really liked the beginning.
1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma....
nice though. I really liked the beginning.
on The View On Life by Deb_djb3113
14 Feb 2003, 10:30 PM
For me it looks very rough, in terms of the grammar and such, nice idea though.
on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
14 Feb 2003, 10:35 PM
As far as I know a sonnet is written in iambic pentametre, which is not what you have here, that does not make it a good or bad poem, just not a sonnet.
on some deleted poem
14 Feb 2003, 11:02 PM
I too found it a little confusing, though not as bad as things I have read in the Norton Anthology, the use of Child as the last word didn't seem to fit either. Otherwise it was nice grows on you a bit if you read it several times.
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 8:36 PM
Hi,
I think this is pretty good but in my opinion it suffers because of the repitition, not of the first line, which works, but a few other lines and concepts are repeated in a way that seems unnecessary to me. Still a good effort.
I think this is pretty good but in my opinion it suffers because of the repitition, not of the first line, which works, but a few other lines and concepts are repeated in a way that seems unnecessary to me. Still a good effort.
on Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles
20 Oct 2002, 8:29 PM
Apologies accepted, I still don't understand it.
on Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles
20 Oct 2002, 8:30 PM
Apologies accepted, I still don't understand it.
on some deleted poem
20 Oct 2002, 8:37 PM
This starts well but soon loses itself, the god and the bad is in the rhythm, and the lack of it.
on the black light by crwncka1
23 May 2003, 10:11 PM
Forest is spelt with olny one r = forest
on Hold That Pose by Wulf
26 May 2003, 10:43 PM
Very interesting, nice work