on the black light by crwncka1
23 May 2003, 10:11 PM
Forest is spelt with olny one r = forest
replying on Theory Of Anything by Blue Magpie
28 Mar 2003, 9:52 PM
Hi Zzinnia,
Thanks for the comments, honest critique is always welcome.
Thanks for the comments, honest critique is always welcome.
replying on Assassin Nation by Blue Magpie
13 Mar 2003, 9:44 PM
Yes, and it fits into the iambic well, he was a good and brave man, I hope his death will spur the forces of good in Serbia to oust the organised crime, I believe it will.
replying on Assassin Nation by Blue Magpie
13 Mar 2003, 9:41 PM
Dear Lastobelus,
What a sad opinion.
What a sad opinion.
replying on Meditation 01 by Blue Magpie
16 Feb 2003, 8:43 PM
My facts are right, male lions attack the cubs of other male lions because killing the cub brings the females back into heat and then they can sire their own on her. They do not attack their own cubs but attempt to protect them from other males. The exception of course is where foods concerned when they will be aggressive towards even their own females, but not lethally.
on Mastermind by wOrnella Mutiw
15 Feb 2003, 10:19 PM
Hi,
1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma....
nice though. I really liked the beginning.
1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma....
nice though. I really liked the beginning.
replying on Parting the Curtains by Blue Magpie
15 Feb 2003, 10:10 PM
Ah Ianswriting
Yes thanks.
Yes thanks.
on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
14 Feb 2003, 10:35 PM
As far as I know a sonnet is written in iambic pentametre, which is not what you have here, that does not make it a good or bad poem, just not a sonnet.
on The View On Life by Deb_djb3113
14 Feb 2003, 10:30 PM
For me it looks very rough, in terms of the grammar and such, nice idea though.
replying on Meditation 02 by Blue Magpie
12 Jan 2003, 8:17 PM
Hi Bill,
Thanks for pointing out the possesive error. Interesting that the bit you liked most was the kernal the poem was built around.
Thanks for pointing out the possesive error. Interesting that the bit you liked most was the kernal the poem was built around.
replying on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie
26 Nov 2002, 8:28 PM
Hi Hobojo,
Thanks for the reply and for the suggestion.
Thanks for the reply and for the suggestion.
replying on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie
26 Nov 2002, 8:24 PM
Hi Caducus,
Yeah, the combination of spin doctors, Tony Bleah sent 40, and the WTO made the summit a bit of a wimp out.
Yeah, the combination of spin doctors, Tony Bleah sent 40, and the WTO made the summit a bit of a wimp out.
replying on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie
26 Nov 2002, 8:21 PM
Hi Ranger,
Thanks for the reply and the crit, seeing how long I worked on this it's amazing what still slips through.
Thanks for the reply and the crit, seeing how long I worked on this it's amazing what still slips through.
replying on Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie
24 Nov 2002, 10:10 PM
Hi Caducus,
Thanks for the vote and taking the time to comment. I thought I did specify that it is husbands and the hudbands families that are the murders.
Thanks for the vote and taking the time to comment. I thought I did specify that it is husbands and the hudbands families that are the murders.
replying on Creativity. by Blue Magpie
4 Nov 2002, 10:07 PM
Hi Three Little Bears,
Thanks for leaving a comment, but I am sorry to say I do not understand it, as far as I can see each couplet of the the poem rhymes, not just the first half. Could you explain more fully what you mean.
Thanks for leaving a comment, but I am sorry to say I do not understand it, as far as I can see each couplet of the the poem rhymes, not just the first half. Could you explain more fully what you mean.
on Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles
20 Oct 2002, 8:30 PM
Apologies accepted, I still don't understand it.
on Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles
20 Oct 2002, 8:29 PM
Apologies accepted, I still don't understand it.
replying on Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie
19 Oct 2002, 9:38 PM
Well I guess I am not in a position to make decisions for others, but even though Hinduism is not a moralistic religion, in the wat Islam, Christianity and Buddhism are, India is full of teachings that say you benefit by living a moral life, suttee is no more acceptable from the point of view their own societies teachers than from ours, to this extent we are more a manifestation of Karma, than an outsider interfering, how you see it depends on whether you are looking for truth and light, or just an excuse to hate. You will find what you look for.
replying on Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie
14 Oct 2002, 8:53 PM
Hi Nicholas,
Nice to be read by someone who knows what is happening. Yes I am well aware the English di an aweful lot of harm in India, including winding up the Hindu/Muslim thing the precurser of todays border problems.
I see my changing 'truth's' to 'truth is' at sometime has added another unnecessry error, I cover my head with ashes and bemoan my foolishness.
Nice to be read by someone who knows what is happening. Yes I am well aware the English di an aweful lot of harm in India, including winding up the Hindu/Muslim thing the precurser of todays border problems.
I see my changing 'truth's' to 'truth is' at sometime has added another unnecessry error, I cover my head with ashes and bemoan my foolishness.