poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Jill Stockinger (201-220)

Comments byJill Stockinger, 201–220 back. Include replies

on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:50 PM
I was moved. Good poem. Jill S.
on My Heart Has Trembled by TomKWS 14 Jul 2002, 2:24 PM
Great last line.
on Colloid by skaskowski 16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
Going somewhere but not reached it yet...
on infector by zotsf 16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
some good ideas, could use more work tho
on lost by mitchski 14 Jul 2002, 2:39 PM
Liked the last stanza, it stands alone better than mixed in with the not-as-well written rest of poem.
on Jericho by goldfish 14 Jul 2002, 2:20 PM
First line equating ships-plural-with one dove, singular,bothered
me a little tho I guess you mean all in a formation created a sight of "one body." Liked how you kept rhyme going, many good images. Jill S.
on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:23 PM
Not clear enogh, some equations just don't make it for me.
Things too unequal in "weight" ties together. Jill S.
on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:27 PM
The line" The soldier who died for you and I" should be, if you want correct grammar- "for you and me."
Spelling error first line- you meant unattended grave I assume.
Strong feeling evident, but needs a little more work. Jill S.
on A clearer lucidity by Eric Johnson 14 Jul 2002, 2:30 PM
Some good lines- strange use of commas, though.
on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:30 PM
Cutesy!
on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:33 PM
Too saccharine for my taste.
Jill S.
on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:35 PM
Some good parts but most obscured by parts not so well-written.
Best line: Mounts Wilson and Tamalpais getting a better look at each other.
on Anger Management by wlshepherd 14 Jul 2002, 2:37 PM
Seems pretty obvious- but you are "telling" not showing, which does
not make it very good poetry. Clear thought though.
on loki's end by yarlgrenn 14 Jul 2002, 2:40 PM
Good strong imagery. I liked it.
Jill S.
on Spring Haiku by Staika 14 Jul 2002, 2:43 PM
Tear and spear don't work as
being analagous enough, for me.
Jill S. I LOVE "like a heron spearing fish in the cold spring dusk."
on Untitled #2 by LucidRevelation 14 Jul 2002, 2:43 PM
Good! Jill S.
on My Tongue ..... and God by BadPoet 14 Jul 2002, 2:44 PM
Sweet, silly.
on Something New by feelinglistless 14 Jul 2002, 2:47 PM
Too similar to others I have read.
on Untitled Sonnet #1 by Antwon 14 Jul 2002, 2:49 PM
Too many cliches.
on some deleted poem 14 Jul 2002, 2:52 PM
Liked the computer programming
used as poetic structure. Jill