on Sugared Giraffes by Venus
4 Aug 2004, 7:54 AM
Curiously evocative.
on Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug
6 Aug 2004, 8:05 AM
Imagine how bad it would have been
Without the Vicodin!
Without the Vicodin!
on Brats by D. $ Fontera
4 Aug 2004, 7:55 AM
Nice re-write.
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2004, 7:58 AM
Next, one on west nile? Good as limiricks go. A perfect DA tribute.-8-
on some deleted poem
5 Aug 2004, 12:04 AM
Alfred Molina and you, too? Probably one of the few good poems to result from "Coffee and Cigarettes."
on Consolation by Dovina
1 Aug 2004, 9:44 PM
Shoot 'im.
on some deleted poem
30 Jul 2004, 8:19 AM
Who's TISA?
on some deleted poem
5 Aug 2004, 8:56 AM
Yep.
on Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina
31 Jul 2004, 9:12 AM
A Ranticle about god is angst that aggravates misunderstanding. Just remember the sentence. "What Would Jesus Do?" Keep in mind "We're all dying (some faster than others)." Ah there's the peace we seek. -9-
on some deleted poem
31 Jul 2004, 3:19 PM
How dare you!
"I am the Sad Bastard" not you.
Nice subtle rant. -10-
"I am the Sad Bastard" not you.
Nice subtle rant. -10-
on Wha wha guitar by wnot Dovinaw
3 Aug 2004, 7:20 PM
"Spoofing of other users is not permitted."
This is not a spoof. A spoof would be written in the style of ___________(insert poet). This poem is not written in the style of Dovina. It is written in the style of >not Dovina<. Therefore it is just a freaky, jerky elementary school rhyme. It should take its place next to "fat, fat the water rat," "I see Paris. I see France. I see someone's underpants" and so many others in that genre. -5- for showing up and posting.
This is not a spoof. A spoof would be written in the style of ___________(insert poet). This poem is not written in the style of Dovina. It is written in the style of >not Dovina<. Therefore it is just a freaky, jerky elementary school rhyme. It should take its place next to "fat, fat the water rat," "I see Paris. I see France. I see someone's underpants" and so many others in that genre. -5- for showing up and posting.
on some deleted poem
1 Aug 2004, 7:09 AM
Who are you and what have you done with Shuushin?
In general, song lyrics are silly.
Don't worry be happy. And I walk with him and I talk with him...O'er the ramparts we watched...Is that all there is? I've got friends in low places...smells like teen deoderant... If the aforementioned are hit lyrics then yours is at least a -9-.
In general, song lyrics are silly.
Don't worry be happy. And I walk with him and I talk with him...O'er the ramparts we watched...Is that all there is? I've got friends in low places...smells like teen deoderant... If the aforementioned are hit lyrics then yours is at least a -9-.
on The wispears of the night by XxRuby_KillsXx
31 Jul 2004, 3:27 PM
The misspellings and lack of punctuation may be a "style" or a "voice" the writer is trying to convey. I need more input before I judge the poet's spelling and grammar level. -5-
on Mushroom Potion #9 by <{Baba^Yaga}>
2 Aug 2004, 8:08 AM
A modern kind of "I sing the Body Electric." I like it.
on two by unknown^user
2 Aug 2004, 8:11 AM
Wow. Best phrase-"propheteering ministers."
on some deleted poem
31 Jul 2004, 5:45 PM
Ah the delicious Surf and Turf "rump roast&fish." A meal fit for a king. Here, King. Smell the farts and eat the poet. Yummy! -9-
on You Can't Kill A Dead Man! by dougsoderstrom
31 Jul 2004, 5:31 PM
Haiku- 17 syllables, three lines, 5-7-5.
Even though
"You can not kill a
dead man and I am not a-
fraid to die, Buddy"
has the right syllable count, it doesn't stay true to form. I hate forms.
But I like a good line to say when I'm drunk at a bar and some other poet is calling me out(to fight, not to dance). Come to think about it, it works for either happenstance.-5-
Even though
"You can not kill a
dead man and I am not a-
fraid to die, Buddy"
has the right syllable count, it doesn't stay true to form. I hate forms.
But I like a good line to say when I'm drunk at a bar and some other poet is calling me out(to fight, not to dance). Come to think about it, it works for either happenstance.-5-
on Barflies and Bombshells by wilco
31 Jul 2004, 5:13 PM
A second kiss? Not one last roll in the hay? You get the -9- points because you didn't ask for a -69- before the bombshell drops her drawers.
on Mors Omnia Solvit by shit
30 Jul 2004, 8:29 AM
Permanent solution to temporary situation. May I have your shotgun when you're finished, Kurt?