poemranker ::20 most recent comments by limonade (21-40) and replies

Comments bylimonade, 21–40 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on requiem for an ex-girlfriend by natalie 21 Oct 2002, 8:41 PM
Creative writing grad students make me nauseous. Every time I talk to one or hear one read, I seriously consider throwing away my pens and notebooks and never writing again.
replying on My Friend? by Blade 21 Oct 2002, 6:25 PM
Wonderful. You have no idea how painful it can get trapped in a one room schoolhouse with 20 people who make our friend maria look like an inspired authoress. I find myself thinking about how quickly all of that old wood would burn...
replying on My Friend? by Blade 21 Oct 2002, 6:20 PM
So when is it you're coming home?
replying on My Friend? by Blade 21 Oct 2002, 5:58 PM
Of course I know, dearest. I was more hoping it was an ironic statement because I don't like to believe people are that stupid, even when the evidence is right before my eyes.
on My Friend? by Blade 21 Oct 2002, 5:40 PM
Is the bad spelling an ironic statement on everyone's comments against Maria's spelling, or are you just illiterate?
on love by little_angel_maria 21 Oct 2002, 4:47 PM
Don't they teach grammar in the schools in England?
on Love by little_angel_maria 20 Oct 2002, 8:01 PM
Waste. Not waist.
His love won't come back. He probably isn't worth it either. Don't you value yourself enough to live without him?
replying on On a chill morning by razorgrin 17 Oct 2002, 5:31 PM
But you mention so many outside things EXCEPT that. I fyou didn't get into such detail about your window, leaving the house, it would make sense. It's inconsistent with the rest of what you've said. As for throwing rocks at my window... have fun! The chances I'd hear you? Good. The chances I'd care? Slim to nil. You'd get bored first. Or I'd just invite you in for Schnapps...
on You Can by Dariana 17 Oct 2002, 5:28 PM
I only just read this and I'd almost call it plagiarism. It's like borrowing someone else's essay, then changing the words to make it your own. Climb every mountain.
replying on You Can by Dariana 17 Oct 2002, 5:26 PM
I was actually about to call her on that one as well. It's a known fact that you despise that deliciously sappy stuff, and I adore it.
on Girlz by liljsmith87 16 Oct 2002, 5:21 PM
There are these two girls and I love them more than anything
They have everything I want
And nothing but them is anymore important to me

But there of course are some problems
Ones that are not easy to fix
I try my best to solve them
But of course I can't get rid of the pricks let alone this one bitch

Who, used to be my friend
Until she got pissed
Made one mistake
And she put me on "THE LIST"

So now Angie isn't my friend
All because I went wrong
Terryn made my life miserable
Wished at first I didnt belong

But then I look at the good side
Happy the other girl I love is still my friend
And try to make sure
This friendship won't end.

(I took the liberty of correcting your spelling)
replying on On a chill morning by razorgrin 16 Oct 2002, 1:44 PM
I think I've got to agree with Tintagiles, bunny. It's like a gaping hole in the continuity of the piece. There's no transition and the reader finds herself wondering, "Does your sidewalk drive?"
on Irony by w~* ATHENA *~w 12 Oct 2002, 8:39 PM
Uhh... I could just be overtired but... where's the irony?
on Poem #5 (of a series of poems for Boo) by Owner of the Sky 12 Oct 2002, 2:47 PM
I like this, it's very refreshing.
on Shut Out by joho117 12 Oct 2002, 1:20 PM
Have you ever heard a song called "Don't You Want Me Anymore?" by Pulp? It's the same idea, better expressed. Shouldn't it be, "you love me no longer". how much does it hurt you? This is just a statement of fact. Describe your feelings.
on Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit 12 Oct 2002, 1:13 PM
The first stanza doesn't have the power of the second. The birdsongs, the house dog, the roommate are distant from the scene not in that they're not involved with the scene, but in that they don't seem real at all. To me, the way you present them makes them completely lifeless and irrelevant to the action. I would work on everything before "will wrestle from"

Why "dead shape"?
replying on tears beyond hope by Mystifying 6 Oct 2002, 10:17 AM
On the contrary, I think spelling is really important. No matter how good and powerful the spirit of a piece might be, it will get significantly less respect if it is full of spelling mistakes.
on A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle 4 Oct 2002, 9:36 PM
Hehehe... I love it!
on The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo 4 Oct 2002, 9:33 PM
Good Lord... You wouldn't have had to endure a creative writing class at UNB, would you? I like it though. I can't imagine a better piece describing the Seagull.
on I'll Always Remember by NobodyGirl9 4 Oct 2002, 9:30 PM
The only word I can think of to describe this poem is "corny". Try adding some imagery. I'm not usually one to stand up and declaim about what poetry is, but this is prose. The two things that this piece has that might make it a poem are the rhymes, and the fact that it is broken up into stanzas. Still, because it is so severely lacking in artistry, I must label it prose. Get yourself a weblog and post this as a diary entry.