| Re: Axe Murderer by Blindproject217 |
18-Apr-03/1:15 AM |
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Nice effort at a haiku at the end.
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| Re: Is it you by Katie |
18-Apr-03/12:42 AM |
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Excellent until the last line. Keep the ending dark, it fits in with the rest of the poem that way. Other than that it's absolutely delightful (as I'm sure my good friend Mr. Pig would say) 9
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| Re: Hazy days by cleverdevice |
18-Apr-03/12:54 AM |
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Must agree with Fear of Garbage here, but other than that it's great!
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| Re: What Hobbit songs are really like... by Bobjim |
14-Apr-03/8:53 AM |
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I believe that you have just attained your highest score yet!
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18-Apr-03/12:52 AM |
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Aha!!! Originality at it's most beautiful!
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18-Apr-03/1:27 PM |
Possibly your greatest work of them all!
Did you measure it just perfectly so that it fits smack bang at the top and bottom of my screen? I think that for that stroke of genius you deserve a ten.
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| Re: "Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass. by Bachus |
17-Apr-03/11:36 PM |
Fabulous, absolutely wonderful! "That pointed non fruit for lunch".
Only problem is 'apologise' (only 1 p)
Have a good day.
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| Re: Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish |
17-Apr-03/11:29 PM |
Indeed. Has anyone ever had to listen to hours of contemporary French music before? It's hell.
8 I think.
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17-Apr-03/11:33 PM |
Beautiful as far as it goes but I feel it needs more. I also don't know who Jordan actually is, although it might have been intended that way, I think that you need to explain him/her a little more clearly.
Very nice anyway. 8
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| Re: Dear flatulance (dear lord) by Bobjim |
14-Apr-03/8:51 AM |
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I would have given this a ten but...oh, no I wouldn't.
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14-Apr-03/11:00 AM |
I think that line 9 should go "one thing", it flows better. Also put "At the dentist's" at the end of the line before and keep "or appendicitis" seperate. Finally I would suggest that the final comma should be three dots instead (maybe for dramatic effect).
Hey ho, we all have our problems with love but you express them much better than most. Nice work. 8
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Apr-03/11:06 AM |
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Are you ever going to resubmit the Fox and the Unix user?
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| Re: deleted scenes by Bill Z Bub |
9-Apr-03/11:26 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Apr-03/11:32 AM |
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I wrote a poem about spring rolls and very few people liked it. I think food is probably a poor subject to write about on this site.
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| Re: Love Greased by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
9-Apr-03/11:24 AM |
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Excellent poem. For some reason I can't get the image of exploding heroes out of my head...
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| Re: Company 11 (a friendly fire agency) by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
9-Apr-03/11:31 AM |
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Interesting, certainly. Funny to a very limited extent. Um, check some of the rhyme. Probably a 7 for now.
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| Re: The Portal by geewhiz1962 |
9-Apr-03/11:35 AM |
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Well this really confused me, I don't know about everyone else but I believe that it needs to be clearer. I really liked the images though. I'll give it an 8, that should make up for the fact that nobody else has read it yet. Nice effort.
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14-Apr-03/11:04 AM |
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Interesting, certainly...
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| Re: Where's heaven? by cleverdevice |
18-Apr-03/12:51 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Apr-03/12:24 AM |
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Ah! This is one of your best poems GW and I will give it a ten.
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