on Lovers Game by scitz
25 Apr 2003, 11:43 AM
This is awful hard work to read
Some nice images, some surreal images plenty of creative energy
Some nice images, some surreal images plenty of creative energy
on Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT
23 Apr 2003, 10:20 AM
good rhyming
I think this is key to this kind of writing
I think this is key to this kind of writing
on For my wife by INTRANSIT
22 Apr 2003, 10:55 AM
Lead in with gentle cliches
then bang ' a placid pool' really makes this short poem
then bang ' a placid pool' really makes this short poem
on Truth in Lies by BleedingRose
22 Apr 2003, 10:49 AM
not sure i'm convinced, but quite clever nevertheless
on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger
19 Apr 2003, 10:07 AM
Yes I like the rhythm and the sudden stops in it
Quite creative
Quite creative
on visual erotic by princesszoe
16 Apr 2003, 11:46 AM
nice original use of language
but at times a bit distant
but at times a bit distant
on Lost and found by INTRANSIT
16 Apr 2003, 11:43 AM
Cute, short and too the point
I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight
I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this
I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight
I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this
on Februarys mother by INTRANSIT
11 Apr 2003, 10:38 AM
Nice, cant pick any faults
Maybe a bit short
I think a killer line might make this poem,
I hope you find one
Maybe a bit short
I think a killer line might make this poem,
I hope you find one
on Unrequited Requital by OneFingerAnswer
11 Apr 2003, 10:30 AM
vilanelles are difficult to master
this flows well
No mean feat
this flows well
No mean feat
replying on Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig
9 Apr 2003, 12:17 PM
po-etand knowit dandelions are not out of place on a 'lane' and dandelion fairies are the seeds we used to blow when we were younger with laughter .....
Do you remember laughter
dark angel
i know turn to rust refers to the moon turning rust coloured but why would it do that
had it gorged on its own cheese?
Anyway these were two very small points in the poem anyway
ta ta
Do you remember laughter
dark angel
i know turn to rust refers to the moon turning rust coloured but why would it do that
had it gorged on its own cheese?
Anyway these were two very small points in the poem anyway
ta ta
on Fraternity hazing the sheepdog by horus8
8 Apr 2003, 11:26 AM
like the lamb stood dead line
perversely fun imagery excellent
perversely fun imagery excellent
on Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig
8 Apr 2003, 11:22 AM
good wordplay as ever
great flow
A few cliches near the end 'tangerine skies'
and 'moon turns to rust' doesn't seem to mean anything.
I dont think the poem would lose much if you binned them.
As for dandelion fairies, a perfectly fair description.
great flow
A few cliches near the end 'tangerine skies'
and 'moon turns to rust' doesn't seem to mean anything.
I dont think the poem would lose much if you binned them.
As for dandelion fairies, a perfectly fair description.
The sentiment matches the sound of the poem well,
flows like a lucid confession