Are you trying to tell me that a photon being both a particle and simultaneously a wave is not illogical from a human perspective? How about Aristotle and the law of contradiction? (A cannot be both A and not A) In quantum, a photon can be both a photon and not a photon, (a wave) Am I missing something?

Well, you are of course, entitled to your opinion and I am always eager to receive comments on my work. I admit this poem borders on the didactic but I am not attempting to convert anyone, just exploring ideas and contradictions that exist in all monotheistic religions. I doubt the children's book touched on these subjects.

Thank you, vulcan. Religion is not an easy subject to write about though I try on occasion. When speaking to the strange quantum world, logic and reason are totally inadequate and we are left without rational explanations for such concepts as a ten dimensional space/time.(String theory) Very esoteric stuff and I don't pretend to have an answer to.

Definitely not a dualist. I would say more of a monist in that I perceive duality to be a finite concept that is non-existant at the infinite level. Of course, there may be no such state of being and oblivion might be our eventual fate. In that regard, I am a deist but really don't have a clue nor does anyone else beyond blind belief which I personlly believe is a cop-out.
And in quantum mechanics, a basic oneness seems more likely. A systems view that recognizes autonomous parts as manifestations of the whole.

Well...you may be right but I meant to use lots
of words. Really, just experimenting as this is
different for me. Evidently not that great and I
am aware of Occam's razor and an economy of words.

But, my intent was to give this the flavor of poems
written in the days before brevity was in vogue.

"Occam's razor, from pen to paper,
matter diffused; truncated to vapor.
Glanced lasciviously, simply to look,
money embezzler just a common crook.

Blanket of white written as snow,
violent tempest reduced to a blow.
Uncontrolled rage described as mad,
crestfallen sorrow expressed as sad.

All transformed yielding to changed,
orderly straightened is now arranged.
Acute sorrow generalized as sadness,
blissful serenity nothing but gladness.

So Occam's razor intended to show,
scarcity of words the poet's wise goal.
Yet, too much economy in written verse,
may err on the side of overly terse.

So why not embellish the poem a bit?
strike down seemingly better than hit.
Wintery gale more descriptive than gust,
and old Occam's maxim not a poetic must.

No. Talk to the stranger but don't
eat the candy.

Actually, I would be happy if you did read more of mine. In posting on this forum, we all wish for more readers. I was
kind of kidding as I still do the opposite of what I said a
poet should not do. But, not as often as I used to:)

Hi purplestain....
This has definite potential but needs some
work IMO. One example: (line 9)

"Melted my cold icy quard..."

Delete "cold"....The reader knows it is cold
because it is icy. Redundancy is a tough one,
for who knows when it becomes, as an example,
merely more descriptive... and meriting inclusion.

Brevity is a good thought and certainly has
merit though I don't mean length but rather,
an economy of words that is pertinent to the
poem's intention or meaning, whether only 14
lines as is yours or 140. Basically, cut away
the fat whenever feasible.

Hope you don't mind my crit and pleassse, don't
read any more of my poems. Everything I mention
to be avoided... I still do only less often than
I used to:) Really a feel good poem, the type I
should write more often though I doubt I could make
one of mime as warm and romantic as yours.

Upon further reflection, I believe my words
were overly harsh. Some of your haikus are
okay and you seem to have a knack for them.
Why not try different subjects like nature,
paradox or philosophy. You might surprise me
and yourself. Good luck and sorry for the
unwarranted comments though your comments on
my poem were also unwarranted and juvenile.

Thank you vulcan. Your approval is much appreciated.
The world of quantum is indeed strange and difficult
to describe though I continue to try. Too bad more
is not written on the subject as it goes to the heart
of our existence and how we perceive the world we live in.

So you reinvented the Haiku? Trashed would
be closer to fact. At least you are limiting
yourself to three lines.

Pathetic!